“Should I listen, or
should I not listen?” Sometimes you know you should listen, but you decide not
to even though you know, deep down, that you should consider listening to what
others say. This is about a time when I was told not to do something, but I
went ahead. And well, it didn’t go well……….
It
started out as an exquisite summer day, and my cousin Livon had come over to my
house. We were thinking about what we should do. Then after a couple of
minutes, I stated, “Hey Livon, wanna play tag?”
With elation, he
responded, “Yeah! Let’s do it.” My cousin was the tagger, and I started to
swiftly sprint to my backyard where there was an old and rusty fence that I was
able to climb over, but it was made of metal and rigid.
My clever dad saw me and
immediately knew what I was going to do, and then he exclaimed, “Don’t climb
over it, you’ll hurt yourself!”
So then
I sprinted around, and we kept on tagging each other. After that, my cousin was
the tagger, and I ran to my vast backyard; I saw the fence, and an abundance of
good and bad thoughts ran through my head.
Don’t do it George, you’ll hurt yourself. Do it George, it’s gonna be
legendary!!! So despite what my dad stated, I decided to go for it.
With all the mighty speed
that I was able to converge, I went for it! I jumped over an aged tree that was
cut down and put my foot on the bark of it and launched myself over the fence.
I felt like Superman, like I was flying at the moment. Then I felt my foot not
moving, and the next thing I know is that I’m on the floor face-planted with
wood chips on my face. I felt tears rolling down my face, and I heard Livon
hastily sprinting over to me as he saw me on the ground with my foot all
scratched up by the rigid metal. He came over to me and saw me in ghastly pain,
then he dashed to my parents, and I saw them zooming over to me.
My dad, understanding
that I was having a noticeably difficult time getting up, picked me up with
ease and brought me into our house. I was unaware of what my horrendous foot
looked like, and when I looked down, I was stunned. It had looked like a
monster had scratched my foot because there were horrifying red lines all over
my foot. My parents were applying medine and other items because the fence was
rusty and I might have gotten an infection.
After they were done
cleaning me up, and we were settled down, my dad had decided to have a serious
talk to me about what had happened. “George, I had told you not to try to jump
over the fence.”
Then I, understanding
what had happened, responded,“I’m sorry, Dad, I should have listened to you.”
To this day, I remember
that event that had happened to me years ago! I had learned a valuable lesson
that day, which was to always listen to what wise people tell you. They could
be older or even younger. My dad told me not to jump because he was well aware
of the consequences that could have happened. I also learned another important
lesson, which was to always think before you act. If I had thought of the
terrible consequences then, I definitely wouldn’t have tried to attempt the
stunt. Now I always think about the consequences of my actions and take the
advice of people older and younger than me, which I believe is right.
-George
This experience was definitely really regretful, and I could sympathize the pain you went through with the injury. It is very relatable, because we will all make mistakes of being reckless and not "thinking before acting". A line that shows this is, "Don’t do it George, you’ll hurt yourself. Do it George, it’s gonna be legendary!!! So despite what my dad stated, I decided to go for it." It shows how you decided to risk it instead of taking the safe route.
ReplyDeleteAfter reading this narrative, I was reminded of the importance of listening to others, especially my parents. They have been living longer and have more experience in life, and they just try to keep us safe. This is evident in the narrative when your father mentioned, "Don’t climb over it, you’ll hurt yourself!" As a result of not listening, you were injured and learned a lesson.
ReplyDeleteI can totally relate to a lot of things that happened in your narrative. When you wrote, "Don’t do it George, you’ll hurt yourself. Do it George, it’s gonna be legendary!!" I have had that same thought of wanting to do something even though you know it's the wrong choice. But, after reading on and seeing what happened to you after doing something that you knew wasn't a good idea made me realize that listening to yourself and others could get you out of trouble.
ReplyDelete“Should I listen, or should I not listen? Sometimes you know you should listen, but you decide not to even though you know, deep down, that you should consider listening. I like how you started off the story with a question because sometimes it makes other people think back to when they were not listening to other people. I also liked how netley the story was set up.
ReplyDeleteI like how you started your paragraph with a question that most people have trouble answering. It is a great form of engagement and got me interested from the start. “Should I listen, or should I not listen?”
ReplyDeleteI liked when you said ",It had looked like a monster had scratched my foot because there were horrifying red lines all over my foot." It made me feel like I was experiencing it not just reading it from the amount of detail. I liked how there were many lessons to be learned but my favorite was how you should listen to your parent. I can relate to this because I think almost everyone has not listened to their parents and had regretted it right after.
ReplyDeleteI like how the story is relatable, not like everyone have jumped over a fence and hurt themselves but how many people don't think before they act. We have all done it and this is a time when it didn't end well. I liked when you said, "It had looked like a monster had scratched my foot." It gave me something to picture.
ReplyDeletethis was a relatable story fo me I haven't listened to important things and it did end badly for me "I was told not to do something, but I went ahead. And well, it didn’t go well………"
ReplyDeleteI loved how you said, "It had looked like a monster had scratched my foot." It made me feel like it was happening to me. I also can relate to the story because when I was younger I did not listen to my parents. My consequences were my parents would not let me ride my bike for a week. Overall great story George.
ReplyDeleteI like when you started off saying, "Should I listen or should I not." That brought me in and, "Do it George. It will be legendary."and i liked were you learned your lesson in the end
ReplyDeleteI love how you said, "I felt like Superman, like I was flying at the moment." I feel like this story is relatable to every young boy because who doesn't want to fell like Superman and propel over the grass. Mostly everyone jump over a fence and got heart and you couldn't help your self, so someone had to assist you. Good story!!
ReplyDeleteI love how you explained, ¨It looked like a monster had scratched my foot because there were horrifying red lines all over my foot.¨ it reminds me when i was hit in the face with a baseball and i was all bruised
ReplyDeleteI like how you described the contrast between your friend and your dad's points of view "Don’t do it George, you’ll hurt yourself. Do it George, it’s gonna be legendary!!!" shows all the differences between your dad who wants your safety, and your friend who wants to see something cool regardless of if you get hurt or not. I can use this to help me decide between good and bad advice in my everyday life.
ReplyDeleteI like how you told the readers how you knew the decision you made was bad then you knew not to do it again. When you said "To this day, I remember that event that had happened to me years ago! I had learned a valuable lesson that day, which was to always listen to what wise people tell you." I could relate to times that I have been told things that i might not have listened to and learned from it. Good job!
ReplyDeleteI liked how you gave a lot of detail to when you tried to jump over the rigid fence. I felt like Superman, like I was flying at the moment. Then I felt my foot not moving, and the next thing I know is that I’m on the floor face-planted with wood chips on my face." My reaction is that it probably hurt a lot, and with you realizing it knows that you made a mistake then. The central idea I think is always know when something is wrong.
ReplyDeleteThe lesson i learned in your narrative is to listen to others if they think you can get hurt and sometimes you shouldn't listen to your gut. "My clever dad saw me and immediately knew what I was going to do, and then he exclaimed, “Don’t climb over it, you’ll hurt yourself!” I can relate to this because my mom tells me stuff like this all the time.
ReplyDeletewhen I was in fifth grade my parents were up in boston so my brother and I stayed wih our grandparents, one day for lunch me and my grandma were making homemade french fries and we were doing it over hot splatering oil. my grandma said drop it closer to the pan or I could get burned. I was doing pretty well for a little while then my fingers slipped and the french fry dropped into the hot oil it spattered everywhere and it burned when it hit me so we had to rush to the emergency room. since then I am more caful in the kitchen. I like how you chose a really relatable topic because everyone dose things they aren´t supposed to do.
ReplyDeleteI also learned never trust canola oil
Delete"Now I always think about the consequences of my actions and take the advice of people older and younger than me, which I believe is right." I can relate to this quote because thinking about my actions has saved me from doing many bad things in my life. I also agree that listening to wise advice from people younger and older than me is good course of action if the advice is practical.
ReplyDeleteGreat writing piece. Your conclusion bears the age old message of open mindedness. Thinking before acting is an art that we all must learn. "Now I always think about the consequences of my actions" really stood out to me. I've made decisions in my past in haste and ignorance. I definitely could've used this advice at that time. Keep it up!
ReplyDeleteWell done! I like how you really slowed down the time during the part where you were attempting the fence. I also like the part where you said, "It had looked like a monster had scratched my foot," because you really showed how bad it actually was. Great job!
ReplyDeleteThis is a really important lesson. You should take advice from people you trust no matter their age. Sometimes I don't want to listen to what other people have to say when I have an idea in my head. Next time I will remember that I should listen to other people. I really liked the line where you showed all the thoughts in your head, "I saw the fence, and an abundance of good and bad thoughts ran through my head. Don’t do it George, you’ll hurt yourself. Do it George, it’s gonna be legendary!!! "
ReplyDeleteThis shows that you should listen to people no matter who they are especially your parents. I can relate to this because one time I was on a hike with my family and we found a creek so we watched it and I started to get too close to the edge and my parents said to get away from the edge or I might fall but I inched closer and slipped right into the creek. I like how you engaged me by saying “Should I listen, or should I not listen?” I have learned to always listen to responsible people. I can apply it to my own life because I used to never listen so I always got in trouble.
ReplyDeleteAwesome! I really like how you used detail and vocabulary to describe everything that was happening. An example of this is when you said, "I jumped over an aged tree that was cut down and put my foot on the bark of it and launched myself over the fence. I felt like Superman, like I was flying at the moment." I could really feel what you were saying, and I could almost feel a real breeze brushing against me. I can relate to the fact of doing something you shouldn't have. When I was young, I was terrified of dogs, and when one found its way into my backyard, you could only imagine what was going through my head - run. I frantically ran as fast as I could, up to a stairway from my deck. I glanced back, and terrified of the dog, I jumped down the stairs. I fell face down on the floor, and ran inside. What I had forgotten at the time was that my friend's Birthday party was in a few hours, and it would be harder to have fun at a trampoline park with a limp in my foot. I realized, just as you did, that, "Then I, understanding what had happened, responded,“I’m sorry, Dad, I should have listened to you.”" Even though nobody had told me not to take the jump, I should have told myself that it would result in something bad. That also brings me to what I think the Central Idea is - using common sense. I thought this because you said, "If I had thought of the terrible consequences then, I definitely wouldn’t have tried to attempt the stunt." Sometimes, we think about doing things that could result in injury of yourself, or others. When you say that you should have thought that through, you implied that you should have used common sense and though about thwat would happen if you took that jump. That day, when I jumped off the stairs, I should have used my common sense and just thought about what could happen.
ReplyDeleteOuch that must have really hurt. I can relate to doing something even when a parent said not to. When I was 6 I ran to swim lessons after my dad said not to, I ended up almost getting a permanent scar near my eye. The part of the text I can relate with is,"To this day, I remember that event that had happened to me years ago! I had learned a valuable lesson that day, which was to always listen to what wise people tell you."
ReplyDeleteI'm very surprised that you've learn from this experience and so do I. " I had learned a valuable lesson that day, which was to always listen to what wise people tell you." I had once done things that my parents didn't want me to do and this story does relate to me. I've now trusted my family and more often and tried to not do stupid stuff in my life. Nice story hope you have learned your lesson from that.
ReplyDeleteYou are trying to tell people to, "think before you act." I think this is very important because we all have been told this from someone in our lives, but may not use it. You do a good job showing how valuable of a skill this is. I also liked how you used sensory language throughout your story, like in this part, "It started out as an exquisite summer day."
ReplyDeleteThey way you wrote, “Should I listen, or should I not listen?" made me think of me being in kindergarten because when I got home I was supposed to pick up all my toys. There were so many toys on the floor when I didn't pick them up I accidentally hurt myself by stepping on it with my foot. It was a Lego so it really hurt so after that I learned how to pick up my toys after myself.
ReplyDeleteGreat job George!! I can definitely relate to this, especially the feeling before doing a risky thing like this! When you said "Then I, understanding what had happened, responded,“I’m sorry, Dad, I should have listened to you.”I literally got flashbacks. Overall amazing job!
ReplyDeleteI was not shocked that you decided to attempt to jump the fence when your dad said not to do it I liked how you told us what your and he said “Don’t climb over it, you’ll hurt yourself!”. one time I was getting cups out of the cabinet and there was a glass and it fell out of the cabinet and I went to ketch it and there was a pot that was write under the cabinet and it fell out and I went to ketch it and it hit the pot and broke and I grabbed it after it broke and it sliced it open.
ReplyDeleteI love this story! It teaches lots of important lessons. I like the think before you act, lesson. I have a lot of memories of just doing things and not thinking about it first, “ If I had thought of the terrible consequences then, I definitely wouldn’t have tried to attempt the stunt.” I got into lots of trouble whenever I did that. Once when I was really young I decided to just cut off a piece of hair in the back of my head. When my Mom found out, my first instinct was to lie and pretend I didn't know what she was talking about. I got into big trouble when she found scissors on my dresser. Since then I have been a little more careful about my actions. I think that you did a really good job making this story relatable with your words. You used great descriptions to show the thinking of a younger child. Good job, George!
ReplyDeleteonce I had a pile of legos and i played with in it all of the time. My mom told me to clean up the lego pile and I did not. I went to go have my dinner when I stepped on a lego. It was the most painful thing ever experienced but I still have experienced worse. Then I clean up my lego pile into a huge bag because of that. ”Don’t climb over it, you’ll hurt yourself!”
ReplyDeleteI can totally relate to this story. I have broken my wrists multiple times. The first time it happened I feel off a scooter. I didn't listen to my mom when she said to stay off of them and about about a year later it happened again. Then in october I almost broke it again, so that would mean that I broke a bone every year for 3 years. I have the worst luck I guess! Now I try to keep my distance from them because who wants to break a bone?
ReplyDeleteLoved this piece george! When you first said “Should I listen, or should I not listen?” was a great way to hook the readers with a question. awesome technique! I cant think of anything in perticular but I have defenitly expereniced the feeling of knowing whatever your doing isnt going to end well but just going with it. When you said "Now I always think about the consequences of my actions and take the advice of people older and younger than me, which I believe is right." was a great way to look at it. Really thinking about how your actions could result in a bad thing before you do them is something I will be taking from this story and my experiences.
ReplyDeleteI really liked this story. I can relate because to this because I broke my arm trying a stunt too, even though my friends told me not too. I really like how you worded everything for example," It started out as an exquisite summer day."I also like how you taught a very good lesson most people don't listen to. Overall I think you did a very good job and I loved reading this story.
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