Friday, May 3, 2024

      Have you ever been really scared to try something you’ve never done before? Were there scary scenarios circulating through your head? It was a scorching hot summer day in Maryland. At the time, my grandparents, parents, siblings and I were all staying at my cousin's house.

     “Go play outside! You guys have been sitting here all day,” yelled my Aunt Liz.

     “Alright,” I replied without protesting. My cousins, brothers and I went and changed out of our pajamas. Once we all had changed we rushed to go outside. With my eyes and lips closed, I hastily put on bug spray and sprinted outside.  

     “Let’s go to the creek!” said my cousin Liam eagerly. 

     “There’s a creek here?” my little brother Nathan replied in amazement.

     “Sure, we can go, but we’re going to need one of our parents,” Ethan, my older brother, replied.

     “I’ll go get my dad,” I blurted. I ran inside as fast as a rocket and asked my dad to help us take care of my little cousin Nigel while we were in the creek. He glanced at my mom and Aunt Liz as if he was asking for permission.

     “Sure, I guess,” he casually replied. I opened the door, which led into the garage, so he could grab his shoes. I also passed him the sunscreen and bug spray. Then I ran outside to find everyone else running around the yard in circles. Ethan noticed my dad and I standing there confused, wondering what was going on.

     “Took you long enough,” he said while rolling his eyes. 

     “Can you stay with Nigel? We want to explore the creek.” 

     “Why can’t you take him to the creek too?” questioned my dad.

     “We don’t want him to get hurt. Since we’re going to be jumping around and playing he might get hurt.”

     “Fine, I’ll look after him. But we're going to be in the creek too. I have to keep an eye on you kids, so don’t go too far.” 

      “Alright,” we all said in unison. 

     We made our way down the hill, past the bushes and into the creek. My eyes widened. The creek was absolutely stunning. The water was gleaming, and I could see the small fishes moving in the murky water. The little flowers danced gently as the breeze hit them.

     “This is beautiful!” I squealed, admiring the scenic beauty of the creek.

     I turned my head to look at the others to see them hopping on the slippery rocks. “Come on, Sophia!” said Liam, my other cousin. I didn’t move from my spot and watched the others giggling and having fun.

     “Be careful!” I told Nathan as he was jumping from one rock to the other.  “Come on! It’s fun!” he replied as if he had no cares in the world. I hesitated, trying to convince myself to jump. It took a minute before I found my confidence again. I glanced at my dad and saw him playing with Nigel. Hand quivering, lips trembling, I hopped onto the nearest rock.

     “This is a lot more fun than I thought it would be!”  

     “I told you!” said Nathan. I jumped from rock to rock, all the way to the boys. 

     “Let’s go farther down,” said Ethan. As we headed down the creek, Ethan noticed that there were no more stones.

     “Stop here for a second,” Ethan told us. 

     “Why? What happened?” I looked past him to see no more stones to jump on. “Oh. I guess we have to go back,” I replied disappointedly.

     As I turned back I heard a rustling sound. I twisted my head and saw Ethan standing on the steep cliff side. There were a bunch of leaves scattered across the ground and a small tree with no leaves too.

     He continued to go farther ahead, and everyone else followed him. Everyone but me.

     “Are you sure I won’t fall?” He turned around and came back to help me.

     “Just jump. You’re not going to fall in,” he assured me. He reached out his hand to help. I gripped his hand tightly and jumped.

     Suddenly he let go of my hand. SPLASH. I fell face first into the water. I turned around and sat down. “Ouch. That hurt,” I winced. My whole body was soaking wet. “What are you staring at? Help me up!” I grunted. 

     “Are you okay?” Liam asked.

     “Yeah I’m fine. But I have to change now.” I looked down at my soggy and sticky clothes and sighed.

     I made my way back to my dad, past the bush, all while my body was numb from the cold wind. I went back inside the house to see my mom and aunt still talking there.

     “Are you ok?!” my aunt asked worriedly.

     “Yup! I’m nice and warm. Not soaking wet,”

     “Sophia.” My mother glared at me.

     “What? I really am dry!” She rolled her eyes at me and told me to go change.

     “Okay, okay,” I said, giving in to her intimidating personality.

     After I finished changing, I made my way downstairs. “I’m going back outside.” I put on my waterlogged shoes and went back to the creek.

     “You’re back? I thought you were going to stay inside?” said Nathan as soon as he saw me. 

     “I think I prefer staying outside.” Everyone's faces lit up.

     We played outside for almost an hour more. Time flies when you’re having fun!

     I felt a sense of accomplishment for trying something new. I usually don’t enjoy trying new things in a different environment, but I took a chance and had a good time. I learned two things from this experience. First, stepping out of your comfort zone sometimes is a good thing. Second, being open-minded to new experiences can lead to fun memories and new hobbies. Always challenge yourself; you never know what you can do until you try.



-Sophia C.





5 comments:

  1. Sophia, that is an amazing memory to have! I can completely relate with that. Sometimes you fail the first time you try it, but you keep on going. You didn’t let that one fall keep you from going back outside. Something like that happened to me too. I used to go to a playground with a big red arch that you were supposed to climb. I was in first grade at that time so I was only allowed to climb up a couple of feet, but one day I climbed to the very top of it. It was a very hot day and my hands were sweaty so I slipped and fell. My arm hit the ground first and it broke. After that I was afraid of going on it, even when I was in third, or fourth, or fifth I didn’t find the courage to climb to the top again. By that time I was allowed to go but I didn’t, I kept telling myself I should go but I didn’t. Soon the last day of 5th grade came by, and I realized that would be my last time to go to the top. I did it. I climbed to the top and stayed there for several minutes, for I did what I thought I couldn’t do. I love the sensory words that you used in your narrative. It felt like I was seeing the memory unfold through your eyes. I loved when you described your fear in the narrative, “Hand quivering, lips trembling, I hopped onto the nearest rock.”

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  2. A strong central idea I found in the narrative was accomplishment. I found the central idea from the line, “This is a lot more fun than I thought it would be!” This line showed a sense of accomplishment, especially after the previous lines, “It took a minute before I found my confidence again.” and, “Hands quivering, lips trembling, I hopped onto the nearest rock.” At first, she was afraid to jump on the rocks, but after trying it once, she found that it was fun and felt accomplished, as hinted by the first sentence I quoted. One thing I loved about this narrative was the techniques you used to make the narrative interesting, which was sensory language in this case. The sentence, “Hands quivering, lips trembling” really showed me how nervous you were to try and jump onto the rocks, and it helped bring the story to life, as well as making it more engaging.

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  3. The lesson I learned from this is to always challenge yourself no matter what. In the text it states” I felt a sense of accomplishment for trying something new. This shows even though it looked tough she still tried it. I usually don’t enjoy trying new things in a different environment, but I took a chance and had a good time.” I can use this in my real life by trying things that look scary, fearsome, or hard.

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  4. Great story Sophia! I love how you used personification when you described the flowers, ¨The little flowers danced gently as the breeze hit them.¨ It really brings what you're trying to see to life. You also used great description when you described the creek, ¨The creek was absolutely stunning¨ It gives a lot of opportunity for you to imagine what it looks like! Overall, this personal narrative was great!

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  5. Sophia did an amazing job with her Narrative. She kept me engaged the whole time. She said, “ I hesitated, trying to convince myself to jump. It took a minute before I found my confidence again. I glanced at my dad and saw him playing with Nigel. Hand quivering, lips trembling, I hopped onto the nearest rock.” After reading this, I saw that she has shone a lesson that can be applied to everyone’s life. That lesson was, to learn how to step out of your comfort zone. It may not be easy, but it will definitely have an impact on us in hopefully a positive way. Another lesson that was shone was trying something new. Sophia tried jumping on the stones as something new. Trying something new can always have an impact on us.

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