You lay there in the
operating room, tense. As your sister mumbles words of comfort to you, your
eyes start to swell up like sponges. You cherish what might be your last
moments on earth with your sister just before you go into surgery. Finally she gets
up and says her goodbyes to you and wishes you good luck. You say your thank
yous and goodbyes as she’s escorted from the room. Soon after that, the nurses
hook you up with anesthesia, and as they’re talking to you the world starts
spinning around you, but you feel a sense of confidence both in your medical
team and how your surgery will turn out.
But what is confidence?
And how can you use it to be successful in life? The meaning of confidence is to have full
trust in something or somebody’s abilities. It can accomplish a lot more than
you would probably think at a first glance.
In addition, confidence
can be used to become more successful in life. My father exemplifies this
pretty well after his recent heart surgery in July. During this surgery he had
his chest opened and multiple arteries replaced, one of the riskiest surgeries
somebody could have.
But even with all of the
risks that the surgery offered, my father still managed to power through it. So
how did he manage to do so? My dad, before he even went into surgery, was
confident. He was confident because everybody, including his surgeon himself,
told my father that he was in great hands, and that the chances of something
going wrong were slim to none.
Furthermore, my father’s
surgeon told my father that if he were to enter surgery stressed, it would
actually decrease his chances of the surgery going as planned, which became a
coping method of some sorts for my dad, relieving his anxiety and helping him
maintain a sense of tranquility. Due to
all of these factors boosting my father’s confidence, he was able to have a
successful surgery.
In conclusion, confidence
is a great character trait that can help you succeed in life, as my father has
displayed all throughout his open heart surgery, and the recovery after it so
far. At the end of the day, even when you may be at your lowest, having
confidence in yourself might just be the thing that could possibly save your
life.
-Aiden P.
Confidence helps us feel ready for life's experiences. Aiden states “My dad, before he even went into surgery, was confident.” So although Aiden’s dad knew that there was a possibility that the surgery might go wrong and he might die, he powered through with confidence and had a successful surgery. I like how you pose a question when you say “But what is confidence? And how can you use it to be successful in life?” This makes the story more enticing and makes me want to keep reading.
ReplyDeleteI really liked your paragraph because my brother had to go into multiple surgeries and I can relate to your sister's point of view. I also really liked how you choose confidence as your trait because I didn't even think of it as a useful positive trait till now. You explained how your father's surgeon told him, “if he were to enter surgery stressed, it would actually decrease his chances of the surgery going as planned” and now I understand how confidence really does help that.
ReplyDeleteThroughout your story you mention confidence a lot. I think that when you struggled with confidence you really made the story come to life. You questioned, "So how did he manage to do so?” I think that when your dad has such high levels of confidence some of it will come on to you.
ReplyDeleteAiden, my gosh this was a great story! The opening to your piece was amazing. Although I have never had a surgery done on me, my grandpa has had many surgeries on cateracts and everytime he had one, I would always get worried. But he always said he was gonna be ok in the end. This story fits perfectly for the message of the story, confidence! In your story, your way of words are very sophisticated like when you said, “Soon after that, the nurses hook you up with anesthesia, and as they’re talking to you the world starts spinning around you, but you feel a sense of confidence both in your medical team and how your surgery will turn out.” Very good job!
ReplyDeleteAiden, I really like your opening sentence! The way you put the story in our own eyes by saying, “You lay there in the operating room, tense.” makes it feel so much more like I'm actually awaiting surgery, showing the feelings and writing in first person. Also, your sentences are so detailed using different describing words, “Your eyes start to swell up like sponges.” was short but it still was super descriptive. Overall your writing is so good!
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ReplyDeleteConfidence as a central idea is a good one. A lot of people are unconfident and this is an example of why you should be. I also like the figurative language that you used such as “your eyes start to swell up like sponges.”