Evading and maneuvering
through obstacles, your feet pound rhythmically on the ground as you dash
forward. Bolting hurriedly down the endless corridors lined with lockers, you
spot a clock on the wall changing from 1:29 to 1:30. You begin to lose hope,
and your mind starts to slip, becoming distraught by terrible thoughts that
spiral and flit through your head: thoughts of detentions and attendance,
thoughts of your parents punishing you for being tardy to a class. You hear a
mighty, magnificent, metallic thunk as all of a sudden your head begins to
throb. A gleaming and brilliantly painted surface fills your vision, seeming to
laugh at you assertively. The delicate case of writing supplies you had been
clutching to your side escapes your trembling grasp, slips to the ground, and
opens, the contents from within spilling out onto the hard surface. You drop to
your knees, rapidly shoving all the scattered utensils into the case from
whence they came.
Another student runs by,
examines the scene you have created, and shifts their attention back to the
classroom door to their left. Rushing and fumbling, they attempt to open the
door and succeed with the door creaking painfully and them rushing inside. Your
worry increases, knowing that undoubtedly you will be marked tardy, and growing
angry that you were ignored. But your troubles don’t last long, for yet another
late student comes by, spots you, and comes to help you out. That person had
the selflessness to give up their own time and help you, knowing well that they
would likely go unthanked, possibly even to a certain extent penalized due to
this selfless act of kindness. Yet, they still did it, and, at least to
themselves and you, they chose the correct option. Selflessness has helped many
people to be successful, myself being one of them. So, what is selflessness?
Selflessness is a
character trait that encompasses the idea of making a sacrifice of something
like time or energy to help others. This could be anything from helping someone
clean something up to giving someone who is struggling with studying or
homework some help. Selflessness is a very important character trait, too, for
a multitude of reasons. One of these reasons is that selflessness has very
close ties with kindness and is a form of kindness, so the world would be much
more unkind and thus a worse place without selflessness.
How can selflessness be
used for success and personal benefit? Selflessness can be used for success and
personal benefit in many different ways. One way it can be used for success and
personal benefit is by helping others, because, if you help others, others are
more likely to help you. For example, one day, you help someone with his math
homework. And then the next day, you are struggling with your social studies
homework, and the person you helped the previous day with math homework helps
you today with your social studies homework. It lightens the load for both
sides.
Another way that
selflessness can be used for success and personal benefit is if you are kind to
everyone and make sacrifices for others, you will be less ridiculed and shamed
for just being you because people will know that you are a good person. An
example of this could be, say, you go to work. On your way inside, you see a
young volunteer trying to lift a heavy crate inside. You see the time, and you’ve
arrived late. Traffic was rough, and you’re still tired. Yet, you still take
the time to help them lift the crate and place it in its respective area. The
next day, you see a mailman struggling to make it up the stairs with his heavy
bag of papers. You help him, of course, but this time someone sees you. Now,
every day for the next week something along these lines occurs. Eventually, you
become known as a great person; a hero. Once, you were a nobody who was shamed
and ridiculed for holding such a disrespected position, and now you are loved.
This great status was achieved by selflessness granting you it's a blessing.
For another example,
myself. Selflessness is important for me to have because there are lots of
situations in school where people make mistakes, especially when you take into
consideration that kids are immature and make mistakes often and can be very
clumsy - more clumsy than adults, usually. And mistakes can lead to slips and
falls, and slips and falls lead to dropping held items. Thus, I have the
opportunity to give my time and effort to help others when I am in school.
One specific way I have
used and still use selflessness today to succeed in life is when I am alongside
an acquaintance. One bright, vibrant Autumn afternoon, my friend, Josh, and I
were thoughtfully working on an assignment in science class. This assignment
showcased the effect video games have on the brain. Hands throbbing, arms
stiffening, we had nearly reached the end of the assignment. I was farther
behind in my work than Josh (we had started at different times), yet I still
stopped when he asked for help. He wanted help starting a short answer
paragraph, and though I hadn’t arrived at that part of the work yet, fatigued
and tired as I was, I read the instructions aloud to help him out. I came up
with a basic start for a sentence and talked it over with him for a spell.
Finally, once Josh
understood, we both went back to work and finished that part. Next, we had to
fill in a graph - a graph that I knew nothing about. But Josh did know how to
work with a graph, so I inquired to him for help. He accepted and discussed the
work with me, helping me to fill in answers along the way until I finally
understood. We both gave our time to help each other, and we are still friends
to this day. This is only one of the many ways I have used selflessness, but it
is a good example.
Selflessness is an
important characteristic to have. Selflessness will let you live life to the
fullest. If we use selflessness in our daily lives, then we will live even
better lives, and other people will have better lives too. Maybe the next time
that you see someone struggling, try to help them out; you never know who might
help you in the future.
-Caleb S.
I think the meaning of this story was to help people even when you are behind. I like the way you used words such as, “Rhythmically, Acquaintance and Assertively.” I really like the way you explained how Josh helped you and how you helped him. Furthermore, I also noticed that you had near to perfect punctuation and grammar. This was very impressive.
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ReplyDeleteSelflessness is a very important character trait for a person to have. I like how you compelled the readers to be selfless and lend helping hands to those who need them. You also did a great job using an engaging voice that kept me hooked into the story, like promptly immersing readers into a stressful situation in the introduction. A quote I like is, “Evading and maneuvering through obstacles, your feet pound rhythmically on the ground as you dash forward”. I like this sentence because of the strong sensory language use. Overall, you did a great job with this writing piece!
Selflessness is a very helpful and important thing in life. I like the thing you said “ Another way that selflessness can be used for success and personal benefit is if you are kind to everyone and make sacrifices for others,” I like this because this gives the reader an overview of another way of selflessness. Another thing I liked is “The next day, you see a mailman struggling to make it up the stairs with his heavy bag of papers. You help him, of course, but this time someone sees you. Now, every day for the next week something along these lines occurs. Eventually, you become known as a great person; a hero.” I like this because it shows how if you show selflessness people will know who is a hero. I love the mature vocabulary like multitude and encompasses. Overall a great job. Love the writing piece!! :)
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I really liked your introduction, especially your hook. It made me feel panicked and rushed on the way to class, terrified when falling, indignant and mad when the first person walked by, and relieved and grateful when the second person helped me. A quote I appreciated was, “You hear a mighty, magnificent, metallic thunk as all of a sudden your head begins to throb.” This line was filled with important sensory language and really made me feel like I was there, at that moment, falling to the ground. Good job, Caleb! :D
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ReplyDeleteCaleb, I really enjoyed reading your narrative! I liked how you made it seem real or like made it seem like a real story. Selflessness is good to get motivated to help others and selflessness is a good character trait. I liked how it teaches you about how to be kind and use selflessness in your life . “How can selflessness be used for success and personal benefit? Selflessness can be used for success and personal benefit in many different ways. One way it can be used for success and personal benefit is by helping others, because, if you help others, others are more likely to help you. For example, one day, you help someone with his math homework.” I liked how it teaches you about how to be kind and use selflessness in your life .I liked the way you added information to hook the reader.