Eyes opened.
Solcien lay on his bed;
sunlight streamed through his window. Rolling to the side, he saw her.
Lulaa lay beside him. Her skin was bright red and eyes bright green. As soon as
Solcien noticed her, she jumped up, startled and fully awake.
“Lulaa!” he exclaimed,
sitting upright. “What are you doing here?!”
Lulaa smirked and put her finger to Solcien’s lips.
“Don’t talk,” she said.
When she touched him, a
vision flooded his mind.
As his consciousness
returned, a great crystalline structure revealed itself deep within the reaches
of the Great Dark Beyond. His vision continued to wander, giving Solcien a bird’s
eye view of the great ship, light from the stars reflecting against the smooth
surface. He then noticed himself at the head, seemingly controlling the vessel.
Velen stood beside him, and his intuition told him Suurath was asleep.
Suddenly, his vision switched to the Solcien he was watching.
“Agh!” He stared at the
control frame before him, suddenly clueless.
“High Astronomer, what
is wrong?” Velen spoke. His hair was grayed significantly, and his skin was
scarred. Solcien searched for an answer, but his mind escaped this vision and
went to another one.
He was on land. Not
anywhere on Argus, but lush savannah-like planet he didn’t know of. He saw many
eredar lined before his village, weapons raised, but he himself had none. He
wondered why he was not fighting.
“Please, help me…”
Looking down, he noticed an injured woman lying at his feet. He was a healer.
“What happened?”
Solcien asked frantically.
“They...cut me…” She
sputtered with every word sounding like it caused incredible pain.
“Who is ‘they’?” Before
he could say anything more, he heard a ravenous battle cry.
With the grass rustling
harshly and a battle horn blaring, great creatures flew from the shadows and
laid siege to the village. They were not eredar, as they had neither hooves nor
tails. Their skin was brown, and they fought on great fur-beasts with reckless
abandon. A particularly large one approached Solcien, raising her axe.
“Draenei scum!” she
roared. “Prepare to die!”
Draenei… that was
Eredun for “exiled ones.”
“Please! I have done
nothing!” But before the creature could hurt him, Lucien jumped out in front of
him, showering the creature in many arrows. A muscular man came behind her,
cleaving his way through the cacophony, his long pure white hair blowing around
him.
“Are you okay, Solcien?”
Lucien said, concerned. The second man who accompanied him looked impatient.
“Keyurk is still in the
village, we must go.” Solcien opened his mouth to respond, but his mind once
again left his body.
Now he found himself
writhing on the ground. A smell of smoke and burning flesh filled the stagnant
air.
“Solcien! You’re alive!”
Suurath crawled toward him. He looked...different, however. Plants grew through
his horns, and buds flecked his skin. He was so pale…
“We crashed...the Exodar
crashed...so many dead…” Suurath cried, gesturing toward the destroyed mass
of metal and crystal. “You’re alive…”
Solcien awoke in the
bed once again. Curiously, he looked to see if Lulaa was still there. Instead,
he gasped at what was in her place.
The Naaru A’dal stood
before him.
“A’dal! Is it you?”
Solcien said in awe.
“Yes, Astronomer
Solcien. I’m sorry I must show you this future for you, but you must know you
are going to survive. I have but one more thing to show you, then you will
awake, because they are coming.”
“Who?” Solcien could
not say it before the Naaru disappeared. He found himself in the sky, though it
did not look like any sky he had been under. The air swirled in a green vortex,
and before him stood a massive demon almost looking like that of an eredar. He
looked as Lulaa did, except many times larger.
He found he stood
beside many different creatures. Suurath was there, still in his botanical
form. Lucien and the unfamiliar man stood tall and confident beside him as
well. Two other teens were there; one fought valiantly with his hands and the
other had fire dancing in hers. The creatures varied in size, and some held
their weapons while others had minions, some even demonic.
The hoofless woman
stepped forward, her armor clanking against her body. Another man stepped
forward. He looked like a beast, though he stood on two legs.
“Kil’jaeden...your time
has come to an end.”
Kil’jaeden? Solcien
looked the demon over. He bore no resemblance to his old self. He wondered if
this was the fate of Lulaa.
He noticed the Prophet
was there. However, he had aged many years. His hair now was long and coarse.
Suurath also had changed. His plant growths were withered and scarred. He
looked almost dead, yet still his soul did not come to the Light. It stayed
within him, fighting to remain on this plane of existence. Velen surveyed the
apparent team, smiling a bit. His eyes met Solcien’s, and he nodded at him in
approval.
“I am so proud of you.
I always knew you would achieve great things.”
-Alexa Gabor
Alexa, great story. I like the way you used figurative/descriptive language in the story. For example"As his consciousness returned, a great crystalline structure revealed itself deep within the reaches of the Great Dark Beyond." And "With the grass rustling harshly and a battle horn blaring, great creatures flew from the shadows and laid siege to the village"
ReplyDeleteI love the complexity of your story! It really made me think and concentrate on the different settings that Solcien went through. One line that showed the multiple aspects of your story was,"Two other teens were there; one fought valiantly with his hands and the other had fire dancing in hers."
ReplyDeleteI think the central idea of the story is taking control of the situation. The lesson is we all have to take control of the situation and things that are going on in our life. So if you take control in your life and take action you can achive great things.It states in the story,"I am so proud of you. I always knew you would achieve great things."
ReplyDeleteAlexa, you have written a very interesting piece. I loved how you used figurative and descriptive language to describe the setting and characters. A place where I think you did a great job of this was when you wrote, “The hoofless woman stepped forward, her armor clanking against her body.” One place where you described the setting in great detail was with the line, “The air swirled in a green vortex, and before him stood a massive demon almost looking like that of an eredar.” Great job with this piece! It sounds like this may be part of a progressing novel.
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