Her
The casket goes
Lower
And lower
And lower
People weep all around
Sobbing, wailing and silently crying
Noses blown, hands held
Hugs given
She looks peacefully asleep
Her face seems like a baby at rest
No strain near the eyes and no creases between the brows
Wake up, wake up, wake up!
Ceremony hits its end
I want my lucky clover,
To revive, retrieve, return her to me
Wake up, wake up wake up!
I remember her as living, loving, laughing
Her life was like a blossoming rose
Flourishing, fragrant and fresh
And she was dazzling
Ink black lace shines into view
tears blinding me, I think
The blossoming rose is freshly cut,
and it’s going to go somewhere special
She could brighten a room like a fluorescent light
She could make you feel loved, loved like a mother caressing her child
She’ll be most happy wherever she may go
Because she’ll be living, loving and laughing
-Leah Punnoose
I really liked this poem, and thought that it had a good central idea. The central idea would be love, and the message from the central idea would be to love and honor the memories of that special person who meant a lot to you. In the text it says,She’ll be most happy wherever she may go
ReplyDeleteBecause she’ll be living, loving and laughing,"
First, let me start out by saying that you did an amazing job, your lines were clear and easy to understand and it drew me in immediately. The lines that I think help to establish the mood are, “ People weep all around
ReplyDeleteSobbing, wailing and silently crying” and “I want my lucky clover, To revive, retrieve, return her to me. Wake up, wake up wake up! “ these help you to see exactly what's going on and how the sudden death of someone important affects the people around them, I especially like how you used alliteration to help us feel how you feel, you want to get her back, it's like you're chanting to have her come back. Overall this story was amazing and is an excellent way to introduce others to the world of poetry
I really enjoyed reading your poem. When you said, "Wake up, Wake up, Wake up," you used repetition to show the readers the desperation you felt, which helped to set the mood.
ReplyDeleteYour poem was really good. When you said
ReplyDeleteThe casket goes
Lower
And lower
And lower
I liked how you arranged the words so they looked like they were going lower, and lower.