With a
flick of a finger, life is gone. Poof. As time goes on and on for eternity, we
can't help to question our purpose. Some wait for life to present
opportunities. Some create intentions and stand with them until death. Born in
a time of bloodshed and greed, one woman shined with nobility. In the midst of
destruction, she threw egotism out the window and chose to aid the helpless
instead.
In the
scorching New Mexico desert lay a village with unwary civilians. The children
ran astray, playing tag and jumping on haystacks. The women gathered in little
circles, scolding the children. Men dexterously rode horses across the land,
hunting, shooting, practicing. The village shaman recalled sightings in his
exclusive cave.
Hatred lay
in the blood of whites and Mexicans for the Apache Native Americans. The
beginning of the industrial age brought new and inventive ideas. Technology,
methods, and lifestyles. Everything changed, except the detestation for
Natives.
The spirit
world was a vast and serene place, wisps of airy spirits floating around,
secrets waiting to be grasped. Catori spent halcyon days gazing into the souls
of another dimension, looking for answers and predictions.
Catori
meditated on the hill in the middle of the village. The dewy grass brushed her
moccasins as if they were welcoming her. The sounds from below fueled her
peace.
The people
skittering on the dusty ground. Patter pitter-patter.
The boxes
of food getting loaded into carts. Clunk-thunk.
The men
training on horses. “Hyah!”
The same
scintillating morning, she felt something. Darkness permeated through the tips
of the spirit world. It was as if an eternal night was brewing. She stood up
from the hill peak. She anxiously skimmed the horizon. A giant shadow of horses
was moving briskly toward the Apache village.
"They
are here, and they found us!" she announced as she slid down the hill. She
rang the alarm bell as raucous as tolerable.
Trotting
on a horse nearby was her brother, the chief.
"Already?" He raised an eyebrow.
"Yes,
I will get my horses ready to fight. I heard the scalp bounty is worth double
now. We must be vigilant," Catori informed.
Mexican bounty
hunters had been attacking Native villages for years. Native American scalp
prices were on the rise, so soldiers had spread wild across the west in search
of villages.
The fluffy
white clouds in the sky turned into swirls of dust that rose like a virulent
wall of peril. Catori ruefully scanned the village. The pedestrians looked so
cheerful, going about their day like nothing was happening.
“EVERYONE!”
Catori’s voice ricocheted through the crowd. They cocked their heads in
surprise. “We are under attack. The Bounty Hunters are a few miles away!” she
blurted.
The
villagers knew not to waste time.
As if a
spark had lit the town aflame, people started bounding left and right. Soldiers
preparing, children hiding, the flame was spreading.
Supplies
were being loaded onto carts when the first blow was struck. Catori gasped and
turned around to find the wall of attackers at the village border, with a fresh
human scalp in the leader’s hand. He muttered something in Spanish.
“Go! Move
forward!” she screeched.
The
miniature Apache army halted when they saw the immense number of malevolent
Mexican soldiers.
She turned
around to find her brother behind her. “Catori,
this battle is not worth your fight,” he admitted. “You must lead the children
to safety. Their scalps are worth three times more.”
“But I want
to fight! I always--”
“No,
sister. Take them to security. It is the right thing, and you know it.”
“But what
about you?”
“It doesn’t
matter. What matters is we do what is possible. And winning this fight is
impossible. Take the kids.”
“Okay.”
Catori started to form wells of water in her eyes. “Goodbye.” She clutched the
reins of her horse and dejectedly trotted away.
The once
joyous town had eroded into a disaster within minutes. Giant sheds of tools
broken, the learning house ransacked of supplies. Homes became barricaded with
feeble individuals inside. Smoke from the brewing battle began to rise like an
active volcano.
Spotting
the old, rotten farmhouse in the corner, she could hear timorous screams of
children in the back. She cautiously trotted over, not wanting to be seen. She
swung the door open to find children no older than eight huddled together in
the corner, lives flashing before their eyes.
In the back
was me, quivering with trepidation.
“Hello?”
She softly spoke. “Come, you are safe.”
One by one,
like the first snowflakes cascading from the sky, kids started to swarm around
her horse. She got off and hugged them like she never had before.
Catori bent
down and hugged me. I saw a heroic woman before me, veneration dazzling in my eyes.
She stooped
and murmured to us, "We must escape, but silently."
We nodded
our heads and followed her out the door.
She ambled out of the barn and gingerly snaked behind the fight scene.
She signaled us to follow. Gradually creeping towards the desert, she sought to
be undetectable.
We
felt a quiver run through the line of people. Something was amiss. Catori
seized her arrows and clasped them behind her back, bow in hand.
"Hola."
She
turned to find a Mexican soldier aiming his rifle at the children.
It was
almost as if nothing was happening for a few seconds.
The gallant
breeze tossed the course sand like puppets. Dried flower petals danced around
us, flying in the zephyr as if they were mocking us. The background buzz of
fighting became clouded into the boundless sky. Catori's horse dug at the sand
like a child idling for its mother.
We were
hindering the inevitable.
As if a
finger snapped, a firecracker exploded, the fight broke. Catori strung her
fingers to the steady arrow while dodging the soldier's bullets.
"Hyah!"
She commenced her horse towards him, and her fingers left the arrow. Fast as a
bullet, strong as the wind, as precise as the galaxy, the arrow pierced him
through the heart. The body slumped down and fell over.
"KIDS-GO!"
she shrieked.
She scooped
all four of us onto her horse and dashed towards the desert.
The comfort
of small buildings soon turned into a barren desert, sand and cacti replacing
loving homes. We had never realized behind our affectionate village was the
scorching hot no-man’s land.
It seemed
as if days and weeks passed. Our sense of time was slipping through our
fingers.
"I
need to send you far, far away," Catori pondered.
Looking
forward into the boundary, she detected a rapid stream moving west. "I'm
sending you towards the other Native reserve." She settled.
After
minutes of riding, she halted and thrust us off. Luckily, a few trees grew next
to the stream. Hurriedly, she tied dense branches together and constructed a
makeshift miniature raft. We knew not to ask questions.
One by one,
like dandelion seeds wafting away from home, we were placed on the raft. I felt
the heat of the sun melt onto the raft, the spray of cool water bubbling at my
fingertips.
Catori shed
a tear and pushed us with great force down the stream. The water carried us
like a mighty horse.
Through the
shrubs and trees, we witnessed a peril swallow Catori. Burly and muscular, a
Mexican soldier crept behind Catori with a rifle cradled in his arms.
A pop
drummed the earth, like mallets pummeling into a gong. Catori fell to the
ground. The malicious figure scraped his knife against her scalp and slowly
peeled it off, relishing every moment, almost as if a serrated knife had slowly
chopped the perfect apple.
Again. And
again. And again.
Like a
sword being stabbed into the soul of a loved one.
He clipped
the scalp onto his belt like a medal. He kicked her body aside and rode off
into the sunset.
We
couldn't even cry. The trauma that unfolded already had us deep in its
clutches. We rode softly, for we knew another hero was lost.
-Nethra C.
I loved your short story Nethra. In this short story there was a lot of figurative language bringing this story to life. One piece of figurative language that caught my attention is when the character in the story says “as if a spark lit our town aflame people started bounding left and right.” I feel this really contributes to bringing the story to life because it shows how news spread really quickly throughout the town warning everybody to get ready for war.
ReplyDeleteI think the message of your story is that life can end at any moment, you question the purpose of life in your story. The first paragraph explains the central idea well. You say,¨ With a flick of a finger, life is gone. Poof. As time goes on and on for eternity, we can't help to question our purpose.¨ You use lots of sensory language, you use a simile I liked while explaining darkness. You said ¨It was as if an eternal night was brewing. ¨ You used allusions to bring your story to life. I had to look some up, like the Apache tribe. I was unfamiliar with them, but I learned that they were a Native American tribe. The Mexicans were bounty hunting for Apache scalps and other body parts. The details you used in the story make it horrifying, it was like I was there while it was happening.
ReplyDeleteThis story is great! I loved that you kept me engaged all throughout the story by using figurative language. The line, “One by one, like the first snowflakes cascading from the sky, kids started to swarm around her horse,” really showed me what was happening in the moment rather than getting told. I also noticed how you used sensory language in that sentence when you used the word cascading.
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