Time ticks by
Plates polished like illuminated moons
Silverware shined till they sparkle
The table is set for dinner
China lined up in a row
The spoons set on the left
And forks resting on the right
Sparkling like the morning dew
Then all at once
Suppose the ground beneath you drops away
Boom
Everything falls and flails and flies
Spiraling down
wherever gravity leads
The sugar soars through the air
The spoon slipping through the clouds
The tea is pouring in a bowl
And the fork falls on the right
Crash
Finally the table lands
It touches the ground with a jolt
A few things crash and break
But some stay aloft
Clink
There's some sugar in the salt
Tea soaking on my toast
Butter in the syrup
And a knife in the pudding
I could cry and wail and stomp my feet
Mourning in my misfortune
Carefully set it up all again
Counting every second
But it seems the more careful I am
Measuring every inch
The table seems to laugh at me
And fall harder every time.
-Jessica Andrews
I think the line that says "I could cry and wail and stomp my feet" means that no matter how mad the character gets or how hard she tries that there will always be something that goes wrong in a way but I like the poem very much I like how there is frustration and irritation. And I like it because its a way different take on a poem you put a very nice twist into this which is really nice.
ReplyDeleteWow. This is a powerful moving poem. I love how it is structured with onomatopoeia. With words like "Boom" "Crash" and "Clink" expressing the way that you felt pain through each time the table fell. It shows us how much it hurt to have to continually pick up the food from the ground.
ReplyDeleteWow, what a great poem. Good Job!. You used a lot of poetic devices which really added a lot to your poem. I liked when you used onomatopoeia. The "crash/clink" it really adds to your piece. It made it come to life. You also used imagery to make the readers see how your perfect table looked before it fell. "Silverware shined till they sparkle
ReplyDeleteThe table is set for dinner
China lined up in a row
The spoons set on the left
And forks resting on the right
Sparkling like the morning dew" This whole stanza uses imagery. It makes it very descriptive.
I think that this poem was really great. I thought that the central idea was about doing the wrong, making mistakes because of the few lines that read "There's some sugar in the salt/Tea soaking on my toast/Butter in the syrup/And a knife in the pudding"
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