The shallow surface,
filled with joy and happiness.
The smile seems to shine in.
The smile seems to penetrate like the sun and the earth.
The love, the laughter, the memories.
Memories are worth nothing when the inside is filled with hatred and murderous desire.
The feelings are the waves that drown all that shall swim within.
The anger knowing you could have had a fantasy.
The Crimson liquid pushes against the papery, delicate surface.
Pushing up and up, squish, squash, squish, and squash.
Trying to make the papery surface break.
Like a butterflying breaking open the chrysalis.
Seeing the glistening light, but none is shown.
Only the insides of an organism, bacteria crawling everywhere.
Escaping the pain, the pressure, disaster and trauma.
No one will see me, only the devil that haunts me.
No one will see me, only the devil that haunts me.
-Maeve Segrue
I liked the lines that said filled with joy and happiness and the smile seems to shine in because it really explains how she was feeling. The figurative language she used helped me understand the mood and feeling of her poem. The structure of the poem did affect the meaning because in the first paragraph she explained her mood and feeling, the second paragraph she explained how she felt and the third paragraph she used figurative language to help the readers understand the setting and what is was like.
ReplyDeleteThe poem starts with lines that create light and happy emotions using figurative language, "The smile seems to shine in/The smile seems to penetrate like the sun and the earth." The poem shows that you can choose if your memories are happy or filled with hatred. "Memories are worth nothing when the inside is filled with hatred and murderous desire." If we focus on all the hate and revenge in our life that will be all we remember.
ReplyDeleteThis is about happy memories being taken away
ReplyDeleteThis poem is amazing and it really shows how it starts of happy and light, slowly transcending into anger and then disaster, ending with hopelessness. I think that the moral of the story is that we shouldn't dwell on the past shown in the line, "The anger knowing you could have had a fantasy." And that we shouldn't allow bad memories to consume us. We should focus on happiness, instead of what could have been. Again this is an amazing poem.
ReplyDeleteI like how the poem uses figurative language and onomatopoeia in the 3rd paragraph with the lines: "The Crimson liquid pushes against the papery, delicate surface. Pushing up and up, squish, squash, squish, and squash." It really sets the tone for the poem on what it felt like and where it was.
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