Pierced my soul until your hate was etched upon my face
You
Plundered my beauty and gambled it for shame
You
Slit my throat and avulsed my screaming lungs
You
Locked me in a dungeon of ruin and threw away the key
You
Hidden in the shadows of this prison
Is the cruel, commanding key
Chiseled on its core
Is a word
I no longer know
Love
-Melody Yu
I love how you used mature vocabulary like "Chiseled" and "etched." The poetic device I believe you used was refrain. For example a line that you used to show the poetic device refrain is,"You." The word you is repeated many times in the poem. Which leads me to believe it is refrain.
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The message based off the central idea is that it showed how she really felt inside when she was being mistreated by the specific person.
This is great. I like how you say "You" after every sentence. It portrays how you're expressing your anger and despair directly at whoever you're talking about.
ReplyDeleteI noticed you used refrain in the first stanza of this poem. The stanza went, "Pierced my soul until your hate was etched upon my face. You. Plundered my beauty and gambled it for shame. You. Slit my throat and avulsed my screaming lungs. You. Locked me in a dungeon of ruin and threw away the key. You." Also it's nice how you set your stanzas and lines up so it would show a heart after the central idea of the poem. A broken heart.
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