“Operation Pied Piper” -
September 1, 1939
The
smell of dense and noxious smoke filled the blank sky. Not the pleasant and
nostalgic smoke you smell at a campfire. This was the smoke of war and
vengeance that took over my hometown. I crouched next to my bucket of water,
hopelessly wiping the ash mark off my torn shoulder.
“Richie! Oh you little
boy, come over here!” cried Mother in her pleasing voice. I scrambled up from
the curb and ran towards her in delight. It had been two worrying days since I
last saw her. She scooped me up with her scraped up and worn out hands, and I
hugged her with all the energy that I had left.
Once I opened my eyes and
saw her tear-filled cheeks, I knew something was wrong. She hugged me for a bit
longer and put me down while still holding my hand. We walked up an almost
deserted street, with a couple carpenters still repairing a house that suffered
a bomb raid last night. The decimated house had huge cracks ripping down the
side. A few home guards were patrolling the streets with young and fearful
faces.
“Where are we headed,
Mother?” I asked.
“You will see, darling,”
answered Mother in a rather sad and tired tone. In the distance, I could see
the dark, gloomy clouds and the sun peaking out from the side. Sometimes I looked
at the sun glancing down at me from behind the clouds and I saw hope, hope that
lightened my skin and dangled in my milky eyes.
After strolling through
emptiness for a few minutes, we saw a large amount of bustling people crowded
around the ticket area at the train station. A lot of them were hugging their
children and sobbing uncontrollably, and I couldn’t understand why. A train was
waiting on the far side of the station, already with five to six small and
plump heads peeking out of the packed windows like goats gaping out from their
pen, desperate for food. We headed towards the railway, tears dropping down
from Mother’s cheeks. As we approached a side entrance, we came to a stop.
“Mother, are we going on
the train?” I asked excitedly.
“No, Richie. You must go
alone; I have to stay,” she uttered. The tone of her voice had haunted her, and
she became silent. I knew she was trying to hide her sadness and worry. We
hugged until our arms got numb, while tears filled my eyes. I was one of the
last people still on the sidewalk, but I didn’t want to let go. I wanted to hug
her forever until the last days of humanity.
Soon, she let go. I
hurtfully walked onto the train and huddled onto the closest window seat along
with a couple other kids. As the train started to move, I scooted over from the
others and peaked through the window for one last time, and I waved at her,
knowing it might as well be the last time I saw her.
As the train gained
speed, I gazed out into the empty half of the city. Piles of debris and wood
scattered across the deserted streets. Clouds covered the gaping sun, making
the sky colorless. It was as if a wave of dread and emptiness had burned
through a once blossoming city.
Just as I was examining
an old closed down book store, a loud roar rippled through the train, followed
by a colossal explosion. The train skidded to a stop, lurching me forward and
slamming me into the seat in front of me. I yelped in pain, blood leaking down
the front of my head. As I regained my balance, I heard the crying and
screaming of other helpless and scared children. Instantly, two more explosions
set off on a train car nearby. A savage vibration spread through the bottom of
the train, bursting a fire at the exit.
“Mother, help!” I looked
to both sides of my seat to find nothing but some debris. I was alone. I had no
one to help me but my terrified self. Just as I started crying uncontrollably,
a lady with a white and red badge that read WVS Civil Defense scooped me
up along with a couple other children, and she ran for the exit. The left frame
of the door was already in flames, but there was still a slight opening on the
right side, just enough to let someone slide through. I closed my eyes in fear
as she dove through the door and tumbled onto the rocky track with us on her
stomach.
I opened my eyes to see
the lady wincing in pain as the sharp rocks sliced her back and her legs. I
looked to the distant golden wheat fields to see Mother running from a
distance, weeping her eyes out with her arms spread open. When she got to where
I was, she gave me a delightful hug, and I knew everything was going to be
okay. I gazed up at the horizon and saw a Luftwaffe bomber jet speeding into
the distance. Up above, a giant sun was on full blast towards my skin, with the
clouds out of sight.
-Young X.
Young, the way you had included a ton of sensory and figurative language really brought the story to life. A sentence from the piece that helped demonstrate this is, “It was as if a wave of dread and emptiness had burned through a once blossoming city.” This really helped me stay engaged throughout the story and have a better understanding of the whole piece.
ReplyDeleteWhat I see as the foundation of the story is to never lose hope or give up. What I think the author is trying to offer readers is that you can always be saved and push through the pain. I can apply this to my life by having faith in someone and if you ever lose hope they will find you and support you when things go wrong in life. Even if things seem to go wrong. You can always count on someone to come running into danger to help you.
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ReplyDeleteIn Young's writing piece I do not see a very large amount of figurative language throughout the whole story. The best figurative language that I saw was “a loud roar rippled through the train.”
The central Idea seems to be mostly about bravery. Some examples are the main character being brave enough to get on the train and leave his mom, the other that WVS Civil Defense officer running on to the train to save him and some other children.
The history really came alive when he really went into detail when he gave a very good representation of the bombed town. He also talks about a Luftwaffe bomber plane that dropped the bombs. I think that he is talking about when parents had to send their children away so they wouldn't get killed in the bombings.
I love the way you used figurative language in your writing l“I looked to the distant golden wheat fields to see Mother running from a distance, weeping her eyes out with her arms spread open.” It made me feel right there with all the commotion but still at that moment. Also, the way you described the screaming and the explosion brought it to life
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