Do or don’t? One of the hardest questions to ask yourself, especially when playing with your friends. You should think about the consequences before you try to do anything and restrain yourself if you think you shouldn’t. In other words, have self-control.
The restaurant’s doorbell chimed as we walked out into the magnificent sunset. The sky was a calm pink and orange. As I used my scooter to ride on the sidewalk, I distantly noticed a person waving. He yelled, “Wanna have a race?!”
I was about to reply when my mom whispered, “Don’t! He has an electric scooter! He’s going to be way faster than you! And you’re going to fall. Look at how many holes are in the road!” I debated whether or not to do it.
Without answering, I rode over to my friend. “Sure!” I yelled back, although a bit anxious.
“Alright!” he announced, “Start here.”
When he said ‘Go,’ he suddenly halted.
“Why’d you stop?” I asked, secretly glad that he stopped.
“My scooter ran out of charge,” he replied, “Be right back.”
He went in for a couple of minutes to plug it in. Then he came back out and said, “It’ll take a while, sooo… what do you want to do?”
We played around for about an hour when… his mom came out. “It’s fully charged,” she reported, “Have fun!”
“Alrighty! Let’s do this race!” my friend exclaimed.
I was ready. I had my scooter positioned away from the nearby bumps and cracks in the road.
“3, 2, 1, GO!” my friend yelled.
I didn’t make a sound. I instantly slammed down my feet on the broken road. My friend instantly sped ahead of me. Dodging and weaving, I rode in between the rocks, trying not to fall.
I saw a hole in the road. I started to turn the handle to avoid the hole as much as possible.
My foot went in the hole.
I felt my ankle turn to an odd angle. The front of my foot hit the rock that had come free of the hole. I fell down and caught myself. I felt an empty feeling in my ankle. I looked down. I saw blood streaming down like a waterfall. I saw my friend stop. He turned and ran towards me. So did my parents.
You should always have self-control. It helps you make better decisions, not stupid ones like mine. Just remember what happens when you refuse to make the unsensible decisions over the sensible ones. Just remember what happens when you don’t have self-control.
-Atharva N.
I think your piece is great, and your story is too! I love the example and not how it just perfectly describes the trait, but how it supports every other trait that goes along with self control. The vocabulary is amazing; so many big words. Some of them I couldn’t even read! Just kidding, but a really great story.
ReplyDeleteAtharva had a very engaging story, he made me get drawn into the story right when it started. Right from the beginning I could think of how I could relate to his story, like when I have made mistakes when I should have thought about it. My reactions just kept flowing in realizing what may happen, not knowing what's next. My reactions were the most insane when the story said this, “I was about to reply when my mom whispered, “Don’t…” then later following with, “ Without answering, I rode over to my friend. “Sure!” I yelled back, although a bit anxious” Atharva definitely wasn’t thinking like his mom did, and of course, was not thinking about the punishments. I think a lesson I definitely learned was to think before you do or speak because it can hurt you or others with your words or your actions.
ReplyDeleteIn your story I think the main message is to always have self-control over yourself. This message came right to me from the very start when you stated, “Do or Don't? One of the hardest questions to ask yourself.” I definitely agree that that is a very hard question to ask yourself. You need self-control to answer that question for yourself. Everything has an outcome, good or bad. I can relate to this because the same exact fall happened to me, but on my bike. You included so much detail and really made me picture the road and the setting of where you fell. This is a great example of why self-control is so important.
ReplyDeleteAtharva, I liked how you used figurative language on how your ankle was bleeding, looks like a lot of blood! I’ve had an experience like this one but me and my friends were racing on our rollerblades on a “bumpy” road and I fractured my elbow, you must have been in A LOT of pain The lesson I learned from this experience was to be careful when making decisions especially if it's not a reasonable one. I will be very careful when making my decisions when it's hard to decide.
ReplyDeleteAtharva: I can relate to your story really well. When you said,” I looked down. I saw blood streaming down like a waterfall.” It reminded me of a time when I was younger and I tried to ride my scooter on rocks. I also liked when you said,” I felt an empty feeling in my ankle.” because that’s how it really feels. I also agree it is hard to decide If you should do something or not.
ReplyDeleteAmazing story Atharva! We all make decisions every day, to make good decisions you have to have good self control. You said, “ Without answering, I rode over to my friend. “Sure!” I yelled back, although a bit anxious.” Although earlier you were warned and you weren’t supper sure about it you didn’t want to feel out of place and you wanted to fit in. I think this was a great example of why self control is so important.
ReplyDeleteI love the moral of your narrative Atharva; do or don’t, you has an engaging voice that brings me into the story. His central idea made me think about how I should be more careful about my choices in the future.
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