Tuesday, May 2, 2023

      The golden sun glistening down on the deep, blue lake. Speeding down the great, long body of water while getting the advantage of deciding where I want to go. Being in control of the big boat with a shining red stripe on the side as it skims easily across the water. I could not have done any of this if I did not try my very hardest to get my boater's license. 

       As I walked down the endless staircase late at night, I could hear the keys to a computer making a solid clicking sound. I was very interested, yet nervous. Who would be awake at such a late hour? I glanced down the hall from the middle of the staircase. It was my dad. He was taking some sort of test. The test looked lengthened and aggravating. I wondered, what could it be? He peered over at me and questioned my appearance. I asked him what lengthened and aggravating test he was taking. He told me that he was taking his boater's license test. My dad had been wanting to get his boater's license for what seemed like a million years now. Cruel covid stopped him. Fortunately, he found a test you can take online. Questions traveled through my head like an airplane flying through a cloud. How old do you have to be? Does the test only count for boats, or jet skis too? It just so happens to be I had just met the age standards, so that gave me some pleasing ideas! I wanted to take the boater's license test. I will be the first out of all my cousins to legally drive a boat. 

       Prior to covid, my family and I had been going to Lake George all my life and even before my existence. Lake George to me was like a voice calling my name. A voice only I could hear. ¨How often do you go there anyway?¨ I answered this question a lot. I used to be able to say too many times to count, but we then stopped. I missed it a lot. Every Sunday I spent home in the summer, I would lay on the bench right outside the back door of our house. I would be thinking. Thinking about what? I was thinking about what I would be doing right now if it were a normal day. I would be riding the waves on water skis and playing basketball with my cousins on the court. I had been reasoning about myself a lot and I knew all those Sundays I was being lazy. I had to do something about it, so I bolted inside, and I began my goal of achieving my boater's license. 

       Being caved in the walls of my home in fourth grade made this goal of mine feel like it would never end. Video by video, question by question, day by day. Warily and steadily, I took these quizzes like it was all or nothing. All of these limited videos and quizzes built up to the 60 question test. I took my time, worked at a durable pace and was simply dreading the day I had to take the huge and alarming test. That test would determine if I had passed, or if I did not pass.

       My hands were shaking, and I felt a shock run through my body. All I could see was the computer screen that boldly read, ¨Click start to begin.¨ I gradually moved my mouse to the start button, and I clicked it. Suddenly I was hesitant. I forgot everything that I previously learned. This was a nightmare come true. Boater's terms were rushing through my head back and forth. I had a troublesome time thinking. I then realized that I just needed to give myself a boost. I said to myself, You can do this. Quickly and spontaneously, all the negative feelings I felt were gone in a split second. I took my time and tried my best to answer each question precisely until the computer screen read, ¨Click submit once completed.¨ I was proud.

       Patience was not a characteristic of mine. Truthfully I don't think ever will be. Every afternoon, I had this instant feeling. Immediately I had to check the mailbox. I was waiting for the letter of truth to come and worried many of my days. Most of the time, that was all I could think about. I walked down to the mailbox with no enthusiasm. I knew that it would just be another day with a mailbox full of magazines. I tugged on the handle to the mailbox and slowly brought it down as slow as a turtle winning a race. I looked through the mail. To my surprise, there was a letter that said, ¨Alivia Sheridan.¨

       I sprinted as fast as I could inside and into the kitchen. I called out to my parents to come down and look at the letter with me. They did. Gently and easily I opened the envelope and pulled out the paper. I read it slowly and shouted with glee, "I passed!¨ I could not wait to inform my cousins about this achievement of mine. I felt like I just won the lottery.

       Looking back now, after getting the advantage to drive around the jet skis and boats in Lake George, I realize that all my hard work paid off.  It was worth it because I put my mind to it. Even though at times it was hard, I got through it. I just gave myself a positive boost! You can also do anything if you work hard at it and never give up.





-Alivia S.


5 comments:

  1. I really liked how you started by describing how it felt to be driving a boat. “Being in control of the big boat with a shining red stripe on the side as it skims easily across the water.” It made me think right back to when I first drove a boat though a lake and it brings me back to all the amazing memories. And, It really helps me visualize your experience and inserts me right into your story.

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  2. I like how you used similes to make the narrative more engaging. I also like the metaphors that you used such as, “Lake George to me was like a voice calling my name.” A simile that I like is “Questions traveled through my head like an airplane flying through a cloud.”

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  3. Alivia’s story has the central idea of patience; patience is important because when you wait for something instead of trying to rush it there might be a benefit towards you. The way you used figurative language really made the readers envision what you were saying. For example, “The test looked lengthened and aggravating.” You did a really good job writing this!

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  4. -Sometimes constantly working hard is aggravating. But I agree that it pays off. Alivia said, “I realized that all my hard work paid off. It was worth it because I put my mind to it…” I agree with this because if you think negatively your results will be negative. She also said, “ I opened the envelope and pulled out the paper. I read it slowly and shouted out with glee, “I passed!’ This is a great example of trying hard pays off. I also enjoy how Alivia had a very engaging voice and how I could follow along easily. I can relate to this because when I did rec soccer, we were going to play against a strong team. And I had to practice different moves to prevent anyone from scoring. After a week of practice, I finally locked down the trick. And to my surprise it worked! Reading this reminded me of that and motivated me to work harder.

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  5. Aliva, I really liked how you added your memories of your times at LakeGeorge/ the memories of the times you spent with your cousins. I also liked how hard you participated for the boat test by watching videos and taking quizzes before the test. By reading the passage you can tell that you were excited to be the first out of your cousins to drive a boat legally at the age that you were. And seeing that your lesson was hard work pays off is that I can relate to it because when I tried really hard on something that I really like or really want to complete I would normally try my best on it.

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