Brave
Days go by we see,
Our Past selves,
Our Youth,
Our Ignorance,
For what we were then was
different,
Unspoken,
Unprepared,
Untouched,
Months go by,
Life has changed,
Our eyes now focused,
Yet we still can't see,
Our vision crawls abroad,
We've tried,
We've failed,
We've lost,
Hope escapes,
Fear enters,
Our minds fill with smoke,
Years go by like a plane so
high,
Thoughts so deep fog our mind,
No way out,
Stuck,
Why?
Why can't I climb?
Climb so high where
all can see?
Our age,
like a clock churns,
Time is up,
But the day still continues,
All of what was left has
disappeared,
Dissolved,
Decayed,
All of what was left has been
ripped from your grasp,
Now you're here,
Moving forward,
Each step,
Demoralizing,
Walking your path,
What was there is now gone,
What was there has left,
What is here is who you are,
What will be there is up to
you,
Be Brave
-Daniyaal Qazi
Great job!This poem has a strong message everyone should take in.Lots of people can't be brave or have confident in themselves. When you say "We've failed We've lost" it really showed me how much bravery you have to have when try to do things. I think the message is to have confidence in what you do. Overall great job!
ReplyDeleteGood job writing this poem. I liked how you refrained a lot in this poem. You repeated some parts of the words and added more. Like the line "We've We've tried,We've failed,We've lost."
ReplyDeleteI love your poem. The structure of the poem is important to the topic because as you read the poetry, the way it's written makes you stop and think about what Daniyaal Qazi meant. It was well written.
ReplyDeleteThe way your poem was worded amazed me. days go by we see, our past selves, our youth, our ignorance. what these few lines did was made me remember back to the good old days. How we were uncaring ignorant and untouchable. How we thought each day was another of no worry of harm of life crashing on our actions. Of are actions having bad consequences. The mood was great and .unforgettable. Your poem was inspiring please write more
ReplyDeleteNicely done! This poem really showed your mood and in a really nice way! Lines like "our minds fill with smoke" as well as "years go by like a plane so high" are really moving. This descriptive language is a great way of expressing an idea!
ReplyDeleteBeautiful poem! I think the message of the poem is that the future is uncertain, so be brave and face it. I think the line that supports that is "What will be there is up to you/Be brave". The message is important and a lot of people don't realize it. Great job!
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