Grappling void
tension,
that suppresses,
Hoists your confined
frame,
that conceals,
Bolts your presence
within the air.
Corrupted sights
swirling,
ripping at your mind,
Muscles tensing as heat rises,
as consciousness is
cut off.
Lashing out,
You flay the
competitor,
Releasing absolute onslaught,
Spoils quenching your pain.
The
trophy that you have earned,
Is short lived,
As
desolation,
Inanition,
And
hollowness
Nourish
your absent pain.
-JunHo Oh
I think the central idea of the poem is war. The line "The trophy you earned, is short lived," could symbolize how even if a side does technically win the war, there are no real winners because of the death that came along with the victory.
ReplyDeleteThis poem is really intriguing! I really liked the structure of your poem. To me, I feel as if it is showing that the trophy that was earned is dying out and not lasting. As it says in the last stanza, "The trophy that you have earned,
ReplyDeleteIs short lived,
As desolation,
Inanition,
And hollowness
Nourish your absent pain."
Really good job!
This is a great poem! I loved the way you described the fight.
ReplyDeleteI think some lines that you used to establish mood were, "Corrupted sights swirling, ripping at your mind,". I liked how you used imagery to display what you see during the fight.
Overall, this was a very vivid and stringent poem.