Everyone
has something they're afraid of, right? One might say a fear. And at this
moment in time on April 21st at 3:34 PM, 2021 in Honolulu Hawaii, I was about
to face one of my biggest fears, and this is where it all started…
Step
by step I could feel and hear my heartbeat: bum, bump, bum, bump. I looked down
at my feet; little puddles of water wet my toes. I lost my grip for a second,
and my nerves went ballistic. I grabbed on tight to my dad's arm so I didn't
smack my face and lose all my teeth on that excruciatingly sharp rock. Yeah,
you heard me, sharp rocks. You're
probably asking a lot of questions right now like what did she do or why was
she on that rock anyway? Well, my fear was how high up the rock was, and the
fact that I was about to jump into that relentless, bottomless pit of blue. The
ocean, a very beautiful relentless, bottomless pit of blue, I might add, but
still terrifying. I heaved myself upwards onto the platform from where my dad
and I jumped. He offered me his hand, and I gratefully and hastily took it so I
wouldn't trip again.
I
looked up from where I was standing; the view was absolutely breathtaking. Who
would have thought something that magnificent even existed! But what must go up
must come down. I looked down, and immediately I wanted to turn around. But I
knew I couldn't; I had come so far! However, I wasn't fully convinced yet, so
my dad and I unanimously voted and decided he should go first (by unanimous I mean not really unanimous at
all). That was mostly just me voting, but there was no way I was going first,
so he went. He stepped up to the plate and started to plug his nose; all of a
sudden things started to feel surreal. We had to wait for just the right moment
to jump because the waves were getting pretty tempestuous and could wash us
deeper into the ocean.
“Now!”
He jumped; he actually jumped! As he did he looked like he was having the time
of his life. Now it was my turn. I stepped up to the edge, believing in myself
that I could do this, that this would probably be one of the most captivating
moments I would ever experience. I mean really, this was a once in a lifetime
thing during a once in a lifetime trip with the people I love and care about
the most. I could do this. So I jumped. It was like time froze, like I was
stuck in a freeze frame or in a slow motion video.
I'm
jumping, still jumping, BOOM! I hit the water, and the
waves crashed into my dad and me. I felt like I was on top of the world,
ecstatic! Like I could jump over and over again. We swam back to shore with big
smiles on our faces. We did it; we actually did it.
On
that day, I learned that if I could build up that much courage inside of me
anything is possible. The message I’m trying to convey is we are stronger than
we think. Although your fear might not be jumping off a rock into the ocean,
everyone has something they are afraid of, and if you build up enough willpower
and believe in yourself, you can face anything you put your mind to.
-Kaylee A.
ReplyDeleteKaylee, good job on your Narrative, you made it seem like it was the worst thing that had ever happened because you said “ Well, my fear was how high up the rock was, and the fact that I was about to jump into that relentless, bottomless pit of blue.” Then you felt like you could do anything like when you said in your message “ I learned that if I could build up that much courage inside of me anything is possible.” It shows that it doesn’t matter how much you’re scared just do it once to get it over with.
The lesson I learnt from your story was we all have fears, but overcoming those fears is what allows us to be courageous. This stood out in one sentence, "On that day, I learned that if I could build up that much courage inside of me anything is possible." One of my biggest fears used to be making mistakes and letting everyone down, but I overcame it just as you did.
ReplyDelete“I looked up from where I was standing; the view was absolutely breathtaking. Who would have thought something that magnificent even existed! But what must go up must come down.” I love this part in the story because it really brings energy. It starts as you describing how beautiful the view is and than in brings energy like you were about to concur your fears (which is actually what was gunna happen) It was like the final countdown to jumping. Good job on your narrative!
ReplyDeleteYour narrative was really well written, but the part that kept me engaged the most was the amount of detail that you put into it. "Step by step I could feel and hear my heartbeat: bum, bump, bum, bump. I looked down at my feet; little puddles of water wet my toes." I really liked that in the story because it helps the reader see what you are telling.
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