Looking over the blue
horizon, I saw nothing but water. Clear skies and deep blue water surrounded
me. This was my perfect paradise. But it can effortlessly change. The dark
water grew grimmer and eerie as the murky clouds drifted overhead. With no land
in sight, this would become the truly ultimate nightmare. But in this
terrifying world, you either bravely fight or cowardly run.
I tied my sail onto the
faded metallic hook and pushed off from the shore. My goal for this expedition
was to survey the shore. I didn’t know much about this lake except the area
around our dock, so I wanted to explore around.
Slicing through the
waves, I quickly sailed my boat into deeper waters. I had a vigorous feeling,
and I was ready to sail into anything the waves threw at me. The wind on Warner
Lake was almost nonexistent while standing on the shore, but once I was forty
or so feet out there was a consistent breeze floating my way.
I wanted to stay close to
the shore to give me a better impression of the lake I grew up on. The shores I
had whizzed by on our tube were now revealed to me. The sail slowly tugged my
boat along the shore, passing docks after docks and house after house, and each
one was as peaceful as the last.
The true beachline on the
northern shore had muddy and rocky sand. It was the only place that wasn’t all
rocks and smelly seaweed. To the south near the dam, it was very shallow and
somewhat sandy, but it was full of seaweed. The eastern shoreline was rocky and
seaweedy, and the western shore was similar. To the northwest, it was dark and
uninhabited. From where I was I saw a small wooden dock, but that was it.
As I approached I saw
that small wooden dock protruding from the forest’s shadow in more detail. It
looked very worn and old, but why was it here in the middle of an uninhabited,
dark, grim forest? I continued farther along the murky coast towards the edge
of this place when the wind shifted. All
of a sudden, instead of going forward, I went nowhere. When I realigned with
the wind to sail across the waves, I was pulled towards the shore. I was
hopelessly stuck in this bog.
I didn’t know what to do
as I crept closer and closer to the shore. The waves pushed me closer to the
shore, and the water was dark brown. I was nervous; no, I was scared for my
boat and my life. Fighting bravely against the wind was my only escape, but it
was nearly impossible. If I went into the wind then I wouldn’t move, but If I
went with the wind then I would be marooned. I only had one painfully slow
option, using the rudder as if it were a fish’s tail; I slowly pushed forward. Left,
right, left, right was all I thought. Left, right, left, right. My
arm was tired, and I just wanted to give in. I still pushed on. Left, right,
left, right.
Hours passed, and I was still stuck in unknown
territories. I slowly made more progress away from the grim forest, pushing
back out into the open lake. The water slowly turned back into its deep, dark
blue once again, and I felt a wave of relief now that I was winning in an
unlikely war.
As I got back out into
the open water, the wind no longer pulled me towards the shore and now was
helping me push forward, but by this time it was getting late, and I needed to
return to our old dock. I cut through the middle of the lake instead of following
my original route and quickly carved through the water towards the rock I had
pushed off hours ago. The journey back was uneventful, which was a good thing
after the battle back at the unknown shore. Every now and then a small gust of
wind pushed me along.
Bravery aided my safe
return from my expedition like how it aided Leonidas's three hundred or the
French at Dunkirk. Bravery is one of the most important traits to have in life.
Problems that need to be solved or faced won’t wait forever, for if you don’t
face them then they’ll face you.
-Walker J.
The writer used very good descriptive language and made you sort of really feel like you were there take for example “The wind on Warner Lake was almost nonexistent while standing on the shore, but once I was forty or so feet out there was a consistent breeze floating my way.” This one sentence makes you really feel like your the one floating out on the water.
ReplyDeleteWalker used sensory language in order to engage the reader well. When he wrote, “but why was it in the middle of an uninhabited, dark, grim forest,” it helped me understand the setting much better.
ReplyDeleteThe way you had included a great amount of sensory and figurative language throughout the narrative really kept me engaged. A sentence from the text that really represented this is, “Slicing through the waves, I quickly sailed my boat into deeper waters.” It really helped me grasp a better understanding and make the narrative more engaging.
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