While grabbing my new stuffed animal with one hand, I desperately cling to my grandma’s hand with my other. My mind starts to drift off about how different things will be after this. There will be lots of change, but change can be a good thing, right?
Reluctantly, I cautiously step on to the shiny, bright elevator. The beeps of the buttons and the sudden shake around me flip my mind back to the present. My stomach swirls violently, screaming at me to get out of the elevator just as it comes to a sudden halt. As I push my feet into the ground, trying to stop my body from flinging across the tiny, trapped space, the door slowly creaks open. The light floods my eyes as I carefully step over the crack of the elevator. We begin to make our way over to the room my mom is in.
As we walk for what feels like hours, passing doors and going through corridors, my mind drifts back to how much my whole family’s life will change. My twin brother and I won’t just be the only kids anymore; we will have a little brother too. We will be growing up with a little sibling.
As we finally stop at a door, my Papa opens it, leading us in. I take in my surroundings. I see my mom laying in a hospital bed, my dad in a chair beside her, and a baby being held by her on her chest. The baby is wrapped in a blanket; only some of his little head is visible.
I greet my mom and dad and then get a better look at the baby. He is sleeping, his little eyes drifting up and down with every breath he takes.
As my mom looks at the baby, her eyes look like they are going to explode with joy. Even as she’s talking, she can’t stop smiling. The smile creases on her face look like they are going to be permanent after today. My eyes wander to my dad. He, too, is smiling. There is so much love radiating off each of his movements right now, his love spreading across the room. Then I look over to my grandparents. They, too, look over at the new baby, both of them waving their hands at him. As they wave, their fingertips dance around the room like the excitement dancing in the air. Lastly, I look at my brother. Before walking into this room he looked how I felt, then worried. Now he looks like everyone else in the room, happy.
“What’s his name?” My brother asks the question I have been wondering.
“Antonio,” my dad says delightedly. Antonio, matching my twin brother's name, Santonio.
On the drive home from the hospital I once again think back on how worried I was about my family’s life changing, but after meeting Antonio, I have a feeling that our family will change for the better with him around, and as I enter my house I realize that I learned an important lesson; even though my life will never be the same as it was before today, that’s okay. I learned when I walked into that hospital room and saw the astonished look on my parents’ faces, felt the excitement in the room, and heard the loving tone in everyone's voice in that moment, that all that worrying was for nothing. I learned that change can be a good thing, and you should not fear it.
-Eliana M.
. I really like how you used very descriptive words such as, “reluctantly” and “delightedly.” I think it brings out the feelings your characters had throughout the story. I can also relate to your story because I have a little brother and I remember exactly what had happened once you described Antonio being born. When you said, “even though my life will never be the same as it was before, that’s okay.” I realized that I learned it is okay because we all have to grow up eventually and move on.
ReplyDeleteEliana, Your essay is really powerful! Everything about it was amazing. I thought your message was very clear, especially in the ending. I also enjoyed reading your essay because of the figurative language. For example, ¨As they wave, their fingertips dance around the room¨ It's so descriptive, I can imagine this in my head. Lastly, I liked how you finished the essay. I can definitely apply this lesson to my life.
ReplyDeleteI relate a lot to things so I can feel how much life can change after walking into a room. I like how you always tell the reader your feelings. Sometime in our life something will change and sometimes it’s good change, which you learned after this happened to you in your life. I also like how you explained everyone's joyfulness and what their face expressions were. For example “My eyes wander to my dad, He,too, is smiling” It also gives the reader a good perspective in there head when reading.
ReplyDeleteEliana, I enjoyed reading your piece. I liked that at the beginning of your piece that you made the reader think about what this story was going to be about. I also liked how you were able to fit the lesson into your story at the end, “ I learned that change can be a good thing, and you should not fear it.” Great job, keep up the good work.
ReplyDeleteEliana made the story as if there was going to be something wrong and she used a lot of strong vocabulary showing the motion of how she was feeling with her new brother. When my brother was born I was worried he would be annoying and always take my things but hes fine.Dont judge a book by its cover a lot of things can happen.
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