The
sensation.
The
sickening, sour sensation.
Lingering as
I go on.
Its demons
roaring.
Pleading to
break free.
The
screaming
Of bloody
murder.
The wrath,
The horror.
Catching me
off guard,
Not even
realizing…
Then it
happens.
The
explosion.
It hits me
fast and hard.
Easily
smelling the smoke.
Like a
coyote.
Smells its
prey.
The remains.
Stabbing at
my insides.
Bits and
pieces.
Here and
there.
Then they
all leave.
And then.
Gone.
Until next
time.
-Amanda
Devlin
Amanda, I really appreciated the way you used refrain "The sensation, The sickening sour sensation" to help the reader relate to the central idea. You also brought refrain back a little later in the poem "The wrath, the horror" to continue the feeling of pain.
ReplyDeleteAmanda, throughout your poem you explain the fear. "The screaming of bloody murder. The wrath. The horror" It is so intense and has so many ways of showing the fear or pain.
ReplyDeleteI like how you used alliteration in the first line of your poem. The line was "The sensation the sickening, sour sensation". You had the similar s sound.
ReplyDeleteAmanda the line that says "the screaming of bloody murder the wrath the horror catching me off guard, not even realizing" its showing pain. Its showing your pain on how its catching you off guard without you even realizing it. Amanda your poem was really good.
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