Eyes close,
And you float gently
Through a tunnel
That transports you
Into a new world
A new life
Soft
And simple.
Far,
Far away
From everything troubling,
Everything frightening,
Everything shooting pangs of torment through your mind
Everything firing hot flashes of hurt
Through your soul.
Eyes close,
And you fly.
Delicate worlds,
Filled to the brim with clouds and baby blue skies.
All is forgotten,
As darkness falls from your mind
Dropping away in fragments
One by one
Each lifting 50 pound weights
From your soul.
All is forgotten
As you float,
Imagine,
And dream.
Eyes close,
And you fly.
Racing, speeding heart
As eyes suddenly pop open
And everything hastily floods back.
Pain-ridden days
Brimming with crushing tons of sadness
And smothered in hurt,
Dumping cold, padlocked chains on your heart
That was already heavy
With misery
And anguish.
But soon,
The pounds will be lifted.
Soon,
The chains will be unlocked.
Soon,
The pain will disappear.
Soon,
You will close your eyes again.
Soon,
All will float away
Faster
And lighter
Than a feather
In a storm.
Eyes pop open,
And you
No
Longer
Fly.
But soon,
You
Will
Fly
Again.
-Aria Grisham
Nice poem,
ReplyDeleteI strongly believe that the central idea of this poem that you made is freedom from the last two sections that you wrote
"Eyes pop open,
And you
No
Longer
Fly.
But soon,
You
Will
Fly
Again."
I get a feeling of freedom when you say "you will fly again" as if I am free from a curse, or something that is holding me back from my goals and from me living a normal life.
The poem was fantastic! One of my favorite parts about it was the structure. The way you had mostly short lines of a couple words in the calmer parts, and then longer sentences in the powerful sections."Everything shooting pangs of torment through your mind" was a line that showed a lot of detail and was a very powerful line.
ReplyDeleteGood job! This is a really good poem. I loved all of the imagery that you used to help me imagine what you were describing. When you said, "Filled to the brim with clouds and baby blue skies" in my head I imagined a summer day with sky almost cloudy so you could still see the beautiful blue sky.
ReplyDeleteThis is a great poem! The central idea that spoke to me is hope. Towards the end it says "Soon,The chains will be unlocked." That tells me that there is a burden being lifted off of the person who is the main character for this poem. Another place where I saw the central idea of hope is towards the end where it says "And lighter Than a feather" is giving the person hope to have no burdens.
ReplyDeleteThe message is no matter how hard things get there is always a light behind all the darkness, for example in the poem it says "The pain will disappear" Great job
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