I may look free and alive,
But in reality, I’m trapped inside.
If only one could untwine
From the endless web of lies.
The road that I’ve carved away
Is full of the feeling of deja vu.
This vexing void in front of me
Must close by the next rise of the moon.
I know I can’t continue this mess,
And I don’t want it to go on,
But the fear of despise, and the cage of lies
Makes the wheel turn on and on.
Who knows if they believe me,
Or even care about what’s said.
But little time is left till it is unfolded
And seen, if by June I’m not dead.
I want this mental pain to stop,
And the perturbation to fade.
But I’m confused and clueless on how to destroy
The wasteland that I have made.
-Sara Weimer
This was a good poem and very deep. I thought it was interest how you established the mood in the first two lines by saying "I may look free and alive but in reality I am trapped inside" . It was a good poem keep up the good work.
ReplyDeleteI really like how your central idea is on fear.In your poem it states "I may look free and alive, but in reality,i'm trapped inside".
ReplyDeleteI loved the detail and description that you used in the poem. I think that your central idea was pain. You backed up this central idea really well with lines like "But the fear of despise, and the cage of lies" and "I want this mental pain to stop,"
ReplyDeleteI really like how you used a lot of deep meaning symbolism in your poem. One of these is how you said "The wasteland that I have made." I think this symbolizes the pain and confusion that is going on in the characters mind. Amazing poem it very deep.
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