Sometimes you're
confronted with a choice that you know could either turn out really good or
really bad. When it comes to sibling rivalry, the results of good or bad don’t
matter much; what matters is not backing down. That’s where it all started.
“Do it… do it… do it!”
That was my ten-year-old brother trying to dare me into doing something. Was it
the right decision to do it? No, it wasn’t; so did I do it? Yes…. yes I did. I
was six years old at the time and very competitive. My brother always thought he
was better than me. So I thought if I did this then I would finally be better
than him. You’re probably wondering what I’m talking about.
It was a scalding summer
day; the pool was open. It was a great summer so far, until one day my brother
dared me to go down my steep driveway in a wagon while he was pushing me with
all of his strength. I was so scared. I was in the wagon, and my brother said
to me, “What are you, a chicken?” I wasn’t a chicken. I could do this.
I was zoning everything out around me, but I
could hear a voice in the background saying, “3,2,1!” I was off. I couldn't
accept that my eyes weren’t shut! Wheels wobbling like they were about to fall
off, my heart was racing. I saw the sidewalk quickly approaching, and then I
hit a bump. I went flying! The sprinklers were going, and I hit the sprinkler
head with my side. Slicing and dicing, I went through the grass as I tumbled
onto the road and felt immediate pain. It felt like sandpaper was rubbing
against my side.
Once I was able to move
again I gradually stood up, and I could feel water coming down from my eyes.
Before my brother could see my face, I dashed to my parents in the backyard,
sobbing in my mom's arms. I felt like a fish out of water. My mom picked me up
and brought me inside so she could wash all the gravel out of my knee and side.
After they bandaged me all up I went to my room and didn’t move for the rest of
the day.
I still
have that scar on my side today. It should be a reminder for me to evaluate my
choice and its outcome. Just because you get pressured to do something doesn’t
mean you have to; think about what it could do to you first.
Brooke L.
ReplyDeleteI like that you made the writing engaging by using figurative language. This line is a great example, “I felt like a fish out of water.” This helped me stay engaged during the writing and showed how out of place you felt.
I learned in this narrative that we should always think through something before doing it and we should not do something just to prove someone wrong, because we know that they are wrong. This narrative also teaches us to never do something that we might regret in the future. I think the message really appeared with the line, "Just because you get pressured to do something doesn’t mean you have." I could relate to this in my own life when my friend dared me to ride a bike without brakes down the hill; I knew this was a bad idea and would definitely break my bones if I did that, so instead, I simply said no.
ReplyDeleteThe story provides a lot for the lesson showing how not evaluating decisions can lead to getting hurt or worse. “Do it… do it… do it!” the words of a dare, really connected me and involved me in the story, and the lesson. I, like many others, evaluate situations every day and reap the benefits. Everyone was once and kid and made mistakes just like these, and even today I still do things like these but ill still meticulously evaluate the situation.
ReplyDeleteI like how in your personal narrative you made it very relatable, like when you said, “Sometimes you're confronted with a choice that you know could either turn out really good or really bad.” This engaged me and really added to your writing piece. Good Job!
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