The soft, white, powdery
snow covered our coats lightly in a blanket of puffs. We observed the big
shadow moving across the ground of the chairlift bringing us up the mountain.
We heard the beeps of the chairlift and blades being carved into the snow beneath
us, snow being pushed off the mountain by snowboards and skis. We watched the
figures below us speed by. To my left was a big sign with a deer logo in the
center that said Jiminy Peak Ski and Snowboard Resort. As I was looking down,
something caught my eye. I turned to
look at it; it was a ring of orange fencing. I looked closer. Then at that
moment, my eyes widened, and a big wave of curiosity hit me like a slap in the
face. In that orange fencing, there was a smooth, flat, box jump.
Two years ago, I wanted
to try snowboarding. Now, I have acquired the technique. I was always searching
for new things to try out, like jumps, rails, and riding with my right foot in
front. I had had lots of practice and experience snowboarding, and I was
confident in this jump.
It looked like a
straightforward, simple jump from the chairlift. When we got to the top of the
mountain, we got off the chair and slid hastily off the icy accumulation of
snow beneath our boards. People surrounded us, choosing the trails they were
going to take. Snowboarders were booting in, the sound of clicks filling the
air as they secured their boots. I'll just try it once, I said to myself as I clicked in and did my
bindings.
We neared the bottom of
the prodigious hill. I diffidently rode into the orange fencing. My heart
pounded in my ears. The jump looked ten times thinner. Why did it look so
much scarier up close? I started to slide forward and went right past the
jump. My S-turns made a mistry spray of snow blast through the air as I rode
out of the fencing expanse, the snow laughing at me. A little voice in my head
said, if you don't do it now, you might not ever get to!
I kept trying, going in
the orange fencing, and riding back out. I was despondent every time I rode out
of the fencing unsuccessful, but I didn't give up. No matter how many times I
was unsuccessful, I was going to keep trying. I must've rode in that orange
fencing ten times without success.
“One more run,” my dad said. I knew this was
my big chance. I reminded myself that doing something you're afraid of builds
your self-confidence. My heart was beating out of my chest when we reached the
fencing. I took a deep breath. I blocked out everything around me. It was just
me and the jump. Nothing else. I slid forward in an imperceptible way. The jump
was a good five feet long, but to me it seemed like it stretched on forever.
I slid up the snow mound
in front of the jump, and before I knew it, the smooth bottom of my snowboard
was sliding along the slick top of the jump. I forced my eyes to stay open. My
hands tightened into fists. I could see the end of the jump nearing; I was
almost there. I was still doubting that I was ever going to make it to the end
when all of a sudden I flew off and into the air. My snowboard hit the ground
with a loud thud while I realized I was still standing. I had done it! I landed
it! It was an astonishing feeling. A wave of vibrance hit me so hard it almost
knocked me over. Heaven was coming to earth. “I did it!” I yelled.
What I learned that day
were two things. First, keep trying no matter how many times you fail; I went
out of my comfort zone to try something new. Second, when you do something
you're afraid of, you gain self-confidence.
-Grace C.
wow I can relate I know how hard it is to do something scary, but if you can put enough dedication in to something we can all do it!
ReplyDeleteThe descriptive language for sure made the story a lot more engaging and made me able to picture what was happening. I don’t snowboard but it sounds like it is scary until you actually do the jump. I can relate because I’ve felt like I couldn’t do something until I actually did it. I learned that with enough determination you can do anything if you put your mind to it. I think the C.I. is definitely being determined and the line is, “No matter how many times I was unsuccessful, I was going to keep trying. I must've rode in that orange fencing ten times without success.” Another central idea is also bravery and the line is, “My heart pounded in my ears. The jump looked ten times thinner. Why did it look so much scarier up close?” Then later saying “I slid up the snow mound in front of the jump, and before I knew it, the smooth bottom of my snowboard was sliding along the slick top of the jump. I forced my eyes to stay open.” I liked how you made everything feel like it was in the moment. Good job!
ReplyDeleteBeing confident can be the key to the best memories. I like how you included a lot of detail to help me picture how you feel, and it also kept me engaged throughout the whole piece. I could tell that you were very anxious, but you really wanted to successfully land the jump. You used this quote, “I knew this was my big chance. I reminded myself that doing something you're afraid of builds your self confidence.” At the end, you were confident in yourself and that was what made you successful.
ReplyDeleteI learned from you that in order to be successful, you need to be confident and believe in yourself. You brought that out through a lot of emotion, great job!