Do you ever have a gut
feeling? We all do; it's your body's way of telling you something about a
situation is right or wrong. Well, I decided not to listen to mine because I
was looking for a thrill, which I soon regretted.
It was a beautiful day
for tubing on the InterCoastal Waterway of Conway, South Carolina. The sky was
bright blue, the water was clear, the grass was green, and the energy of people
was just awesome. “Who's excited to go tubing?!?!,” my dad asked us.
“Me!!!,” my siblings and
I yelled.
“I call going first!” I
yelled.
“Nice try, Marina, but you can’t go alone.
You're only eight. Giovanni, can you go with your sister?” my dad asked.
“Why do I have to?”
Giovanni asked.
“Yeah! I can go alone!” I
replied.
“Sorry, but you don't
know what's in that river,” my dad responded.
“What do you mean?” I
asked. I felt a nerve rush through my
body. I didn't think much of it though. It was probably just excitement….
right?
“Who's first?” my dad
asked as he was pumping air into the tube.
“Me!” my sister insisted.
“We will go after her,”
my brother told me.
As I saw my sister
tenderly make her way onto the float, I noticed that it started to go deeper
into the water than I anticipated. I saw her lay down and grip her hands onto
the rope. “Ready?!?!” my dad asked.
“Yes!!” my sister yelled.
I heard the engine start. It sounded similar to a motorcycle engine submerged
in the water. It made a gurgling sound.
The float started to pull away from the boat. “Woohoo, this is awesome!” my
sister yelled.
My dad started to speed
up the engine. I saw my sister cheering from a distance. I laid my arms on the
side of the boat and started to stare. I saw the flat blue water turn into
white-topped waves as the boat went faster and faster. The cheering echo started
to fade as I zoned out more and more. But something caught my attention. I saw
something that looked like the head of an alligator. To me, it looked as big as
a whale.
“Dad!!,” I yelled.
“What? There's nothing there?” he said.
“I swear I saw something,”
I replied.
“You're just seeing
things. There's nothing there!” he said.
“But what you said
earlier! Remember? About what's in the water,” I said anxiously.
“I was just playing with
you,” he said.
“Oh,” I replied, still
trying to process what I just saw.
The engine began to slow down. My sister made
her way back onto the boat. I saw my mom's arms wrap around my sister,
engulfing her with a warm towel. “That was so fun!” my sister said.
“I'm so glad,
Bianca! Marina, Giovanni. You’re next.”,
my mom announced.
“I don't know about this,” I told her.
“What? You just saw how much fun your sister
had,” my mom responded. “Yeah, don't be
a wimp,” my brother said as he punched my shoulder.
“Okay,” I replied, but my
gut was telling me that something wasn’t okay.
That uneasy gut feeling
returned. But my siblings compelled me into doing this, so I couldn't quit now. I anxiously stepped onto the tube. I noticed
it deflating more and more as I laid down on it. Tightly, I grabbed onto the
rope; the anxious feeling inside me flashed.
“Are you ready? ”I heard
my dad ask.
“Yes!!” my brother
screamed.
“Me too!!” I said
excitedly. I guess I wasn't that scared after all. I was just overthinking what
my dad had said to me.
As we started to hit the
waves we went faster and faster, and the jumps got higher and higher. It was so
fun until I heard a noise. The noise sounded like a deflating balloon. “Giovanni?
What was that?” He didn't respond, or at least I didn't hear the response
because of the water in my ear and the sound of the loud motor. I tried to
validate what I was going to say. Before I could say anything, I felt the water
above my head. Riding the raft, we noticed it deflating more and more. As the
seconds passed, we sank more and more into the water. Oh my God, the raft is sinking! I
thought. I was panicking. I’m going
to drown and get eaten by an alligator. This is not the vacation I was planning.
I started to panic, and
my heart beat faster and faster. I tried to claw my way up to the surface, but
nothing seemed to work. I thought I was about to die. I used all the strength I
could to swim, but I got too tired to do much. I wasn't sure where my brother
was, nor where the boat was. All I could see was black. Fear was rushing
through my body, realizing the alligator could be right next to me. The time
started to elapse. I thought I was about to die.
I felt something grip my
arm. I was praying that it wasn't the mouth of an alligator. As I kept getting
pulled up to the surface, I saw my brother. As I gasped to get air, I felt
myself getting pushed up onto a platform. I could barely hear anything with all
the water clogged in my ears like earbuds. I started to cough up water. I felt
a warm towel around me. I could finally see and hear my family members' faces
and voices. Relief flashed through my body.
“Are you okay? I'm so sorry! This shouldn't
have happened!!” my dad said. “I’m fine, don't worry about me!!” I told him. I
felt so relieved, but at the same time, I couldn't process what had just
happened. I just laid there until I fell asleep on the boat. I was so tired it
felt like I had just run a million miles. I could barely move.
You should always trust
your gut no matter what circumstance you're in. Your gut will always lead you
to the right path in life, so make sure you trust it.
-Marina S.
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ReplyDeleteI like how you really keep the reader engaged. With very descriptive writing , “As we started to hit the waves we went faster and faster, and the jumps got higher and higher”. It really brings the story to life, And creates a image in the readers mind. Great piece Marina!
ReplyDeleteWow Marina, that sounds like a scary experience! I can relate to it because I have also had (multiple) near death experiences! I almost got run over by teenagers in a corvette once, and I almost drowned in the ocean! I liked how you used a lot of dialogue in your writing.
ReplyDeleteIn this story I love how you do the conversations you had with your family, and I also love the way the feeling you had,“the anxious feeling inside me flashed.” was a line I thought described your nervous feeling really well.
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed the lesson on listening to your gut. I think of plenty of times, such as when doing a test, where I suppressed my gut feeling and got the consequences. I would say that a lot of people I know need this kind of advice because you have to know to listen to that instinct. You said it perfectly in the last of the story, “Your gut will always lead you to the right path in life, so make sure you trust it.” Great job on this!
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