Have you ever forgotten
to do something? Well, this is how my forgetting to close the door turned bad.
I have two huskies, one named Sophie who is eleven years old, and I am very
close with her. Juno is four years old, a very skittish dog. Sophie is an
off-leash dog, and Juno is an on-leash dog. Both of them were always very
crazy. This is how just forgetting to do one thing turned real bad real fast.
It was a sunny summer day
out on Keuka Lake, and my grandparents were going out wine tasting with my aunt
and uncle; they were gone all day. I said I would walk all the dogs. My
grandpa said, “Juno does not like to be alone for too long. She might run away
as fast as a cheetah if you do.”
It all started when we were at the lake. I thought that the dogs should do some
walking, so I went up to the trailer and put Sophie on the leash, and we walked
down to the water and came back 30 minutes later. I could hear Juno wincing at
the door; Sophie was off the leash, going inside when Juno slipped and slid
through the door, through my legs. My
hand caught her tail as she yelped and ran off as did Sophie. She thought she
was helping, but she was not helping at all; she was making it worse.
As I came
across the road, running, I chased Juno, followed by Sophie, barking with a
deep low voice, echoing across the lake. All the screaming like a wild animal
finally got Dad’s attention, and he looked at the dogs. By the time he was running the dogs were what
felt like miles away, but it was only a few yards. Juno had stopped at a nearby
dock to go to the bathroom. I leaped at the chance to get them both. I first
got Sophie, and then when I went to get Juno, but being so skittish, she jolted. Dad had just
caught up, and Juno was still running but now towards people's houses next to
the highway
I was
running after her, and now people were coming out of their houses just to help.
Dad had just tripped and took a nice tactical roll uphill; that was not even
the weirdest thing that happened. How do you roll uphill? He got so solemn
that it looked like he was about to fight. Dad’s rolling skills scared Juno
even more, so she darted around the corner and zigzagged around the houses
until Sophie and our cousin’s dog, Piper, boxed her in; a guy came out of his
house sleepy and thought Juno was his dog! He picked Juno up and tried taking
her inside like he was a crazed man until his son came out and said that it was
not their dog. The man apologized, and we put Juno on the leash and then slowly
walked them to the cabin, put the dogs in their cages in the house, and slammed
the door shut.
You could
tell by my clumsy and ignorant actions at the beginning of the story that I had
no care in the world about what my grandfather said. Now, because I learned
from my mistakes, I was no longer careless with two huge dogs. I was someone
who was empathetic and learning from mistakes. Essentially, anyone can learn
from any mistake; you will never grow if you don’t learn from your mistakes.
-Vanessa C.
ReplyDeleteI love how your Central idea is that you will never grow if you don't learn from your mistakes. This is relatable to myine and so many others lives.When you used the quote “Juno does not like to be alone for too long. She might run away as fast as a cheetah if you do.” This really showed how easy mistakes can be made.Amazing work.
I love the multitude of techniques you used to make the story more engaging to the reader, especially how you used sensory and figurative language to express characters in your story. I found advanced vocabulary/wording used in the lines, “He got so solemn that it looked like he was about to fight,” and “he was running the dogs were what felt like miles away, but it was only a few yards.”
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed how you helped me envision every single thing that happened in such a chaotic moment! I was on the edge of my seat wanting to know what was going to happen to your poor dog. For example the line Sophie was off the leash, going inside when Juno slipped and slid through the door, through my legs. My hand caught her tail as she yelped and ran off as did Sophie. Really helped me put into perspective how crazy this moment must have been for you! I think the message you are trying to convey relates to so much more than just your situation and lots of people could learn from it, even me! Amazing job!
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