Drip, drop
Drip, drop
The water dripped
harshly into the gigantic sink
The sound of the
water smashing against the sink made her green eye twitch
It also reminded her
of the salty wetness that dripped from her eyes
Alice snatched a
tissue and rubbed her swollen, green eyes with the tissue
Her cheeks a burning
fire of red
She looked at her
mirror with a fire burning abhorrence
Alice then squinted
intently at the mirror that hung from the wall
She then heard her
wooden door fly open like a flock of birds flying right near her
Her mom looking at
her with an apprehensive look
She glanced into her
mother’s direction
staring into her blue
eyes
“What is troubling
you?”
her mom said simply
“Me,” she said as she
ran her fingers through her brown hair.
Her mom stared at her
and grabbed the mirror
setting it in front
of her daughter
She knew what was
getting her
the virus that goes
around to every girl growing up
Alice stared into the
mirror with even more agony and abhorrence
Her mom then plopped
down next to her
looking into the
mirror with her.
“Beautiful”
“Smart”
“Worth it”
“Courageous”
“Incisive”
She then noticed her
face change after each word whispered from her mother
Her face...it changed
in a fast way that she couldn’t even visualize
She cherished it.
She then smeared her
tears off her red cheeks and let out a loud sniffle
before smiling
She then realized at
that second
The lies that bounded
her down were blinding her and filling her head with negative gibberish
She aspirated that
the same
monstrous monster
that blinded her and filled her head with lies
Didn’t blind anyone
else
Because you can’t see
what beauty is truly there with the ugly lies blinding you and with negativity
hazing your vision and your mind.
-Gina Giza
I like how you gave detail of how she was looking in the mirror you said "she looked in the mirror with a fire burning abhorrence". I also liked how you said "her cheeks a burning fire of red".
ReplyDeleteThis was a very good poem with various diffrent messages. The one I pulled from this peom is that you should acept yourself for who you are. My supporting line from the poem is " What is troubling you her mom said simply me she said as she ran her fingers through her brown hair".
ReplyDeleteTo be honest, This is a very solid poem Gina. The way that you used imagery to show how she is feeling with lines like "the salty wetness dripping from her eyes", and " She looked in the mirror with a strong abhorrence", really shows how much she is sad over her looks; and also shows how she is clearly depressed, setting the mood right at the beginning. Great Job!
ReplyDeleteI thought this poem was very meaningful. I think the central idea of this poem is acceptance. I think the central idea is acceptance because when the poem first starts, Alice is upset about her appearance, but when her mom comes in and tells her that she is "beautiful, smart, worth it, courageous, and incisive", she feels much better and learns to accept who she is. That is why I think the central idea is acceptance.
ReplyDeleteThe structure of this poem structure looks like a tear drop from someone crying. I say this because where it starts to say "drip drop" all the way down to where it says "with negativity hazing your vision and your mind".
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