Standing at this precipice
Overlooking vast golden fields
Water washing the gleaming rocks;
as it cascades from springs
Grass weaving in the benign breeze
Flowers flaring up from the grass draped plains
Years Later…
Then we carelessly build towers
erecting from the plastered plains of concrete;
blasting black smog in the air
Trees that towered over me are gone,
as if picked out of the ground
Then we carelessly plow forests,
leaving them barren
Stumps strewn across the clearing,
leaving the only sign they were once there
Then we carelessly mass produce cars
That plow through roads emitting gray gases,
spilling into our dark tainted sky
Then we carelessly have left our earth desolate
Then we carelessly have destroyed our home
Then, we have succumbed to our destruction
-Hayden Amazon
I think the central idea of this poem is arrogance. The line that supports this central idea is "Then we carelessly build towers erecting from the plastered plains of concrete." The line is giving the idea that people are building towers arrogantly in place of the beautiful land that was once there before. They do not care about the land they had to destroy in order to build the tower.
ReplyDeleteGreat job on this poem! Your use of refrain by repeating "Then we..." in most of the stanzas gives the reader a feeling that this cycle of self-destruction may never end, adding to the mood.
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ReplyDeleteI think the message in this poem might be that you shouldn't take the thing that is most important for granted. Earth. You know, the thing that keeps us alive. I think you might be saying that before humans have destroyed it, it was beautiful. You said " Standing at this precipice Overlooking vast golden fields,Water washing the gleaming rocks; as it cascades from springs, Grass weaving in the benign breeze, Flowers flaring up from the grass draped plains." I think you were basically saying that earth was beautiful before humans ruined it. Then, years later, human built buildings, made and drove cars that "emitted gray gases,spilling into our dark tainted sky." You used some strong nouns like, precipice and strong verbs like, gleaming. Overall, great job.
A poetic device that had been used is imagery. A line to support this is “Then we carelessly built towers erecting from the from the plastered planes of concrete.” This line shows the sense of sight because it is recreating the scenery of building buildings.
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