I
look outside
I see
a single, white snowflake
Floating, flying frantically around in
the air
Not caring
about what it looks like
Not
caring that it’s
the only one
Floating
in the cold wind
Then I See other snowflakes fall
Going the
opposite way
All
following each other
“Moving with the crowd”
But
all I really notice is
that
one snowflake.
-Jeffery Burleigh
"Not caring it's the only one, floating in the cold wind" I like your message, I think your message is saying to be yourself and to not be a follower.
ReplyDeleteThe alliteration of "floating, flying frantically" really brought me around. It made me feel light and free like even a little air could blow me away.
ReplyDeleteI think the CI is to be yourself and I think you showed that in the line "then I see other snowflakes fall moving in the opposite direction" and "moving with the crowd" but overall I really liked this poem.
ReplyDeleteI think this poem's message would be: Looks really don't matter (Especially if you're a snowflake). The line, "Not caring about what it looks like" in the poem really expresses that message.
ReplyDeleteJeffery, I enjoyed this poem. I found the message to be unique, in that being above or not in the crowd, be the black sheep in the heard . When you mentioned "moving with the crowd" and then paid attention to the first snowflake, I really took away from that and what to admire.
ReplyDeleteI liked your poem Jeffery. I really like how you tried to make your words form into a snowflake. My C.I. is self-acceptance and the line is "Flying frantically around in the air not caring about what it looks like.
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