Ms. Johnson walked
down a wide corridor and stopped in front of a door with only the word Principal
on it. She took a deep breath and walked into the small, dainty room.
“Hello, Ms.
Johnson was it?”
“Yes, Mr.
Anderson,” replied Ms. Johnson. She quickly sat down on an uncomfortable red
plastic seat.
“Well, I’ve called
you here today because of your son. Ever since that little incident…” The principal suddenly paused on the word incident. “Ever since that little incident four years
ago, he’s become an almost different person.” The principal started to tap his
fingers. Little beads of sweat began to form on his forehead. “He was always
smart and well liked, but now, well. He’s been acting very strange for a long
time now. In all of his classes he’s been seen muttering to himself and
constructing a device that looks otherworldly!”
Ms. Johnson
suddenly stood up and said in an annoyed voice, “Well, thank you, Mr. Anderson,
I’ll see what I can do.”
“Ma’am, I’m sorry,
but this conference is not done ye-”
“Have a good
afternoon,” said Ms. Johnson as the door slammed shut.
It was another
beautiful Saturday afternoon. Birds were chirping, kids were playing outside,
the ice cream truck went by slowly, playing it’s classic jingle and adding the
finishing touch on this nice idyllic, suburban town. But for Jax Johnson, he
partook in no such things. Stuck in his bedroom, he’d been fiddling around with
a device that looked like the world’s most complicated TV remote. Around his
room was a mess of unfolded laundry, strewn dirty plates, and crumpled
blueprints. He heard a door open downstairs and quickly hid the remote under
his bed.
“Hello?” asked Ms.
Johnson.
“Hey,” responded
Jax.
“How was school
today, Sweetie?”
“Just like every
other day, Bridgett.”
“Welp, I’m going
to start making dinner; should be ready at six,” exclaimed Mrs. Johnson
followed by the sound of the stove turning on.
That night after
an uneventful dinner, Jax was lying on his bed and examining his remote under
the moonlit sky. Tomorrow, he thought, tomorrow everything will
change. That night Jax slept well for the first time in four years.
The next day
nothing happened, at least until 4:21 pm. At 3:35 pm Jax sat in solitary on the
roof holding his remote. He started contemplating whether or not to do it, but
he had already passed the point of no return. He slaved away for four years,
working, attempting to find and create technology that didn’t even exist. So
finally, Jax pushed a sequence of buttons, and with his eyes beaming and sweat
forming on his hands, started to wait. Jax waited and waited and waited for
what felt like forever. Until suddenly the air turned cool, dogs started
barking, and a sudden gust of wind almost threw Jax off the roof. Leaves
started falling until a sort of mini tornado started to form. He felt like he
was being watched. Cracks started appearing on the roof.
Jax scurried
around, observing the terrain. Jax’s home was located at the edge of town on a
steep hill. He could see the whole town, and to be honest, it was quite
beautiful, but not right now. He slowly noticed that cracks were starting to
appear all around, as though the houses and buildings were being removed from
their foundations. In no time flat, the small town looked as if it was hit by
an f2 tornado.
“No, no, this wasn’t
the plan!” cried Jax, and suddenly fast as the devastation started, it stopped.
Jax sighed a breath of relief, and although his work was a complete failure, at
least it didn’t cause complete destruction. He always knew this was a potential
risk.
Jax stopped climbing down from the roof at
once. He couldn’t shake the feeling that he was being watched. From out of the
blue a thunderous sound blasted through the air! Blue light filled everything,
creating the smell of petrichor; Jax’s hair stood on end, and he started to
disintegrate.
Jax awoke on a bed
way better than his own. A king sized tempur-pedic memory foam bed to be exact.
But Jax was extremely confused. Did he not just die? At the time he could feel
his very molecules being pulled apart. Maybe this was the afterlife; if so the
afterlife was incredibly like the previous life. No, if this was the afterlife
he would be handed a shamrock shake by a morbidly obese angel baby or
something. So where was he?
Even though he
felt like he had the world’s worst migraine, he decided to explore a little
bit. He was apparently in an extremely white windowless husk of a room. The
color of the room was indescribable. It was almost the color of light
reflecting on the snow, but somehow even more white. There was absolutely
nothing there except for a bed and a tray filled with bacon lying on the floor.
Then from the corner of his eye, he noticed a sliver of movement. Then it
disappeared without so much as a trace. He stared intently at the sliver of movement
for one minute… two minutes… There, it moved again! This time Jax
observed that the thing quickly camouflaged itself after two minutes and 43
seconds. He could see that the thing was obviously observing the room, almost
like it was a security camera. There was a lense, but it didn’t seem to be
attached to anything. Things were getting far more peculiar.
Jax’s breathing
became more rapid. His pulse rate was steadily increasing. He knew what was
happening. He was getting hysterical. The fear of the unknown had always
frightened Jax, but this, no, this was a whole different ball field.
With no other
option, Jax decided to take a couple deep breaths and think. He was trapped in
an extremely white room with a bed, a seemingly almost invisible camera, and some
bacon. And just like any human in this situation, Jax did the reasonable thing;
he started to munch on some crispy bacon. After three strips of surprisingly
delicious bacon, he was slowly peacing it together.
The beams, the
catastrophe in his town, the ridiculous technology, the foreign color of his
room. This was no high-tech military base or dream! It seemed as if his machine
had worked out somehow. Jax had finally reappeared on the alien ship that had
imprisoned him four years ago!
Suddenly faint tapping
sounds rang across the blank room. Tap. Tap. TAP. TAP. The sounds were
getting louder, yet louder, until a strange cylinder opened up from beneath the
bacon. A terrible blue strange head started to emerge from the cylinder. The
alien was simultaneously the most beautiful and terrifying thing he ever saw.
It had translucent eyes, blue skin, and legs that seemed to be reinforced with
a strange amethyst colored metal. It had a spotted cloak that flowed even
though there was absolutely no wind. The alien had arms with razor sharp talons
and even opposable thumbs! But possibly the most incredible thing about the
alien was its hair. It seemed to be mess of snakes, constantly moving around as
though they had a will of their own. As Jax was staring profusely at the alien,
he heard a mess of incoherent screaming. One of the other aliens armed with a
spear pulsing with energy shoved a small cube at Jax’s throat. Jax
instinctively dodged the cube, but the alien moved like a streak of lightning
and powerfully jabbed the cube at his throat.
There was a brief
flash of pain, and then the cube miraculously merged into Jax’s skin; his
throat shined a brilliant blue and then snapped back to reality. As Jax was
thinking about his last will and testament, he heard a handsome voice say,
“Hello, I’m sorry for that little fiasco.”
He quickly pulled out his right hand. Jax hurriedly shook it. “I’m
zero-fifteen, and welcome to The Andromeda 6.”
Jax proceeded to
tour around the ship The Andromeda 6. While walking around the intergalactic
spacecraft, he was amazed at the sheer size of the ship. In comparison his
small cell was vastly inferior. There was artificial sunlight, trees growing
indoors, and aliens of different color streamed around chanting, “Human! Human!
Human!”
“Why do they seem
so happy?” asked Jax.
“Well, because you
helped us find Earth!” responded 015. Technology was all around them, high tech
supercomputers strewn around. Awesome holograms considered only to be science
fiction filled the room. Nonchalauntly, Jax looked around the room, and all of
a sudden he seized a small disk while no one was looking. Jax surprisingly felt
no remorse. He had been captured once before and needed to ensure no others
fell to the same fate.
While Jax was deep
in thought, he was interrupted by 015. “And that’ll conclude the tour! Your
room is in floor 245 (The intergalactic emissary suite). Please enjoy your
stay, and feel free to call for anything.”
Even though Jax
wasn’t really paying attention, he could tell that 015 had purposely skipped a
small room camouflaged to blend in. Jax made a mental note to check it
sometime.
That night, Jax
couldn’t sleep. He wondered how he could get home; he wondered if he would die
here. He wondered how insignificant the
human race was if there were actual aliens. Jax wondered if there was any
meaning to life. Jax often had thoughts similar to these, so he decided to
change the subject. What was in that room, and what was so important the aliens
needed to hide it away?
So Jax jumped down
from his luxurious bed, landing on the balls of his feet like a ninja, and
tiptoed to his door. But the moment he slowly creaked open his door, he saw how
many defensive measures were set up on the spaceship. Guards, spotlights, even
automated patrols! Jax was shocked! who in their right mind would install so
many defensive capabilities?
While trying to
come up with a solution, Jax fished around in his pockets (yes, he wore his
pants to bed). He pulled out the little disk he pocketed from earlier. Etched
on the machine was a language he could not decipher, but his throat started to
tingle, and his head started to pulsate. He could read the text! It seemed to
be a teleportation device. In fine print it said, “Teleport small items only
(Do not give to children below 13)!” But no one reads the fine print…it
appeared to be voice activated.
“Take me to the
room.” Nothing happened.
Jax saw that a
little scribble on the device said, “Be very specific!”
“Take me to the
small invisible room located in the south west wing of the star ship The
Andromed 6.” Oh no, Jax started to receive major Deja vu as he felt his
molecules being ripped apart again.
He appeared inside
of the room! He could tell because
almost everything was in a transparent filter. Jax gasped; this was without a
doubt the biggest room in the ship. There were creatures stuck like lamb to the
slaughter in tanks. There was also a gigantic machine in the middle of the room
that seemed to be incomplete. No, now that he looked closer he could see that
the creatures were humans. People were crammed together like sardines. Not only
that, Jax recognized some of the people in the tubes. Those aliens had not only
abducted him, but his whole town as well!
Jax was filled
with white hot rage. His fury knew no bounds. His classmates, his mom,
everyone! Jax grabbed the teleporter and went straight to the chamber of 015.
This time Jax didn’t even mind the pain. “WHAT THE CRAP?!” Jax screamed at the
top of his lungs, awakening 015 from his slumber.
“Jesus, Human, you
scared me.”
Jax decided to cut
right to the chase. “Listen you blue
turd, I’ve been into the room. I’ve seen the tanks filled with people. Now you’re
going to help me release them or I’ll, I’ll bring you to Earth with me!” Jax
quick drew the teleporter to show he wasn’t messing around.
“Alright, alright.
I can see you’re aggravated, let me get you something to drink.” Jax
instinctively punched 015 in the face. “FINE.”
015’s calm and collected facade instantly disappeared. His voice was dripping
with malice and his fists became clenched.
“Don’t assume you're a paragon of justice, sitting on top of your ivory
tower! You know absolutely nothing about our race, our culture. Our planets are
facing mass extinction! Millions of our kind die every month due to the plague!
And the only cure? Human blood. Would
you not sacrifice 60,000 people in order to save trillions?” 015 paused to take
a breath, hands shaking.
“I, I’m sorry, but why didn’t you just
ask the human race?” asked Jax.
“Do you not think
we have tried? We’ve been here since the seventeen hundreds, attempting to
establish a relationship with you. Man, perpetuated by it’s own fear of the
unknown, has attacked us every single time. In this day it’s even worse. We’ve
observed your media for some time now, painting us in a negative light, showing
us destroying civilizations, while in reality we are more civilized than you
monsters will ever be. You even treat your own species with moral disdain; how
could you monsters ever understand?” 015 whimpered a defeated sigh and said in
an extremely weak voice,“go.”
Shaken up, Jax
hung his head low and teleported back to the prison room. With each step, Jax
felt the weight of his actions. After a walk to the end of the room that seemed
like an eternity, Jax reached a complex machine with mysterious wires and
strange buttons, but at this point Jax had gotten used to it. After a couple
minutes, Jax pressed a blue button tucked away on the far right of the control
panel. The sound of compressed gas echoed throughout the chamber as people
began to stumble out like zombies. Without a moment's hesitation, Jax helped
out the hundreds of people, and after hours they returned back to the blue
planet. But on the way back the only thing Jax could think of was what he had
just done.
Far away in the
depths of the universe, a spaceship drained of all hope floated along
aimlessly. 015 was walking on the main deck, void of all hope. Suddenly he
heard a crunch beneath his feet. His foot was covered in a warm red substance
and glass. Blood, he thought. One foot away another vial of blood
appeared, then another, and another, and another! They soon piled up into a
mountain of vials. Included at the top
was a little spherical device that said, “Do not give to children below 13.”
-David Zhang
David your use of detail and vocabulary really enhanced this story. One line I really thought showed this was "Birds were chirping, kids were playing outside, the ice cream truck went by slowly, playing it’s classic jingle and adding the finishing touch on this nice idyllic, suburban town." The use of the word idyllic was a very nice touch and really brought the story to life for me, great job.
ReplyDeleteI think the Central Idea of the story is be careful with technology. Because "the small town looked as if it was hit by an f2 tornado.
ReplyDelete“No, no, this wasn’t the plan!” cried Jax, and suddenly fast as the devastation started, it stopped. Jax sighed a breath of relief, and although his work was a complete failure, at least it didn’t cause complete destruction. He always knew this was a potential risk." This quote shows the risk of Jax's projected and how it caused his town to get damaged by his project.
i liked the ending and the sense of closure at the end. the use of humor in the story captivated me even more in parts like " As Jax was thinking about his last will and testament, he heard a handsome voice say,
ReplyDelete“Hello, I’m sorry for that little fiasco.”"
That was awesome. I want to read more. I loved how you portrayed that this kid was willing to do anything to get away from his awful life, but it doesn't end up working out. "No, now that he looked closer he could see that the creatures were humans. People were crammed together like sardines. Not only that, Jax recognized some of the people in the tubes. Those aliens had not only abducted him, but his whole town as well!" It shows how no matter how hard you try, some things you just can't escape from. Like my Bio projects. I need to stop pretending they don't exist.
ReplyDeleteYour use of vocabulary throughout the entire story was phenomenal. Many lines used tough words such as, "Nonchalantly, Jax looked around the room, and all of a sudden he seized a small disk while no one was looking." Your story really came to life with the good words you used.
ReplyDeleteI really liked your story. You used detail and a strong voice throughout your writing that made it come to life. What you used very well is sensory language throughout your piece. The lines from your writing that has some sensory words in it is, "Birds were chirping, kids were playing outside, the ice cream truck went by slowly, playing it’s classic jingle and adding the finishing touch on this nice idyllic, suburban town," and "So Jax jumped down from his luxurious bed, landing on the balls of his feet like a ninja, and tiptoed to his door." The use of sensory language really helped me understand and get a better picture of the characters and the setting, well done!
ReplyDeleteThis piece is great! You used a lot of sensory language. "Ms. Johnson suddenly stood up and said in an annoyed voice, “Well, thank you, Mr. Anderson, I’ll see what I can do.”
ReplyDelete“Ma’am, I’m sorry, but this conference is not done ye-”
“Have a good afternoon,” said Ms. Johnson as the door slammed shut." In this part I could really tell how mad Ms. Johnson was because of the use of sensory language. Great job!
The sensory language you used in this story really made it come to life. When you said "Suddenly faint tapping sounds rang across the blank room. Tap. Tap. TAP. TAP. The sounds were getting louder, yet louder, until a strange cylinder opened up from beneath the bacon." I could imagine everything that was happening very clearly. Great job David!
ReplyDeleteThe central Idea was that you should be careful with everything used . The lesson I learned is that you shouldn't be quick to judge. I can apply this in my life to not Judge something by "it's cover"
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“Don’t assume you're a paragon of justice, sitting on top of your ivory tower! You know absolutely nothing about our race, our culture. Our planets are facing mass extinction! Millions of our kind die every month due to the plague! And the only cure? Human blood. Would you not sacrifice 60,000 people in order to save trillions?”