A thin metal rectangle
sat on the white table in the bright room, its silver casing reflecting light
onto the ceiling, still glistening thanks to being perfectly preserved. The box-like structure was small and worn down; after all, it had been stored away for a hundred years, in a room miles beneath
where it now laid, along with billions of others. This was an important day for the modern
world. This was the first time an iPhone
would be looked through.
Just behind this table,
lights blinking and audio buzzing, two robots whirred in excitement, waiting
patiently for the screen at the front of the room to load. In a few moments, the social media connected
to the phone would be projected onto the screen for the robots to analyze. They were doing research on old ways of
communication from the 21st century.
Finally, the screen lit up, and the robots clicked eagerly away at their
control boards, anxiously awaiting the knowledge this box supposedly held.
A dozen colored squares
appeared on the screen, each with a title below it. The bots peered down at their instruction
manual and found what they were looking for.
“Here it is,” said one to the other, tapping a few buttons as the
multicolor icon was highlighted and the folder opened.
“Instagram,” said the
second robot, scrolling through the page.
There were pictures everywhere.
They opened a post with a picture of a young girl on it. “This is Adaline,” the robot said, looking at
the post.
The next post on the
page was a photo of another girl crying in the middle of a crowded room full of
people eating. “Cafeteria,” the first
bot said, pointing to the screen. As
they scrolled through the comments, they read them out loud.
“She is such a child.”
“What
was she crying about?”
“She
failed a test! What a loser.”
“Stop reading the
comments, friend!” the second bot cried
out, antenna slowly changing color from a calm green to a nervous pink. “Adaline was being mean! Why would she share this online?”
The first bot was
confused as well. “What a terrible
friend she was being!”
They decided to move on
from the photos and check other aspects of the application. “Direct Messages- this sound like
communication!”
Upon opening the
messages, the robots were stunned.
“Did you hear about the
incident during math class today?”
“No,
what happened?”
“This boy tripped outside and bruised his knee. It was hilarious! The whole class laughed!”
“This boy tripped outside and bruised his knee. It was hilarious! The whole class laughed!”
“Don’t
you think that’s kind of mean?”
“No,
somebody else kicked his books, too! It
was so funny.”
“I didn’t know people
were so mean,” said the second robot. “Let’s
check a different icon.” The robots
clicked out of Instagram and onto a white and yellow square on the main
screen. “Snapchat,” the robot said.
“Yes,” the first bot
replied as the application loaded. They
tapped some more and opened a chat.
There were many saved images in the chat that Adaline had sent, but they
weren't pictures of Adaline at all. They
were all of a girl who seemed caught off guard, but not in a candid way; they
were awkward and somehow wrong. “She
didn’t know anyone took these photos,” the robot remarked.
The second bot
continued, metal swiftly clicking at the control board, and saw that Adaline
had done this with many other people.
Sometimes there were even hateful comments.
“What were you
thinking?”
“You’re
really ugly.”
“That
outfit is horrendous.”
Often, following words
like these, there were replies from the people who were receiving the
photos.
“When did you take
those?”
The people would
respond to the photos of themselves they didn’t know existed.
The bots closed out of
the app in disgust and opened the icon of a bird on a blue background. “Twitter.
Hopefully there will be something worthwhile on this one,” the first
robot said as the screen loaded the Twitter threads.
Adaline’s phone was
filled with negativity. She complained
about other students constantly and avoided kindness at all costs. The chains of hate never seemed to end. Instagram, Facebook, Twitter, Snapchat,
Tumblr...it continued on. Every app
offered a new way to talk behind someone’s back. The robots had never imagined something as
innocent as a little box of wires could cause so much harm; after all, the robots were just boxes of
wires themselves, whether they knew it or not.
Would this be the type of damage they would cause to the world in 100
years? Or would the cost be much higher?
The robots quickly
clicked out the phone, and one picked it up.
They rolled on their efficient wheels smoothly towards the open window
nearby. He threw it out the window and
slammed it shut, as if the phone were to crawl back in through the
opening. Never again would they bother
with the communication of the past. A
whole generation of study lost. “How
could people be so cruel to one another?”
In this new age, the humans were thought highly of. Not anymore.
“This is why the world
is in the state it is today. The cruelty
has existed forever.”
“We
have to destroy all of the phones; they are too full of bad things and terrible
bullying.”
Weeks
later, the phones were removed from the tidy and unblemished repository and
brought to a landfill where they were ground into the dirt. The phones were over, and the media was
finally dead.
-Nellie Cordi
Nellie, this fiction of yours is so interesting and so important. It talks about the possibility of the future generations to have a negative perspective towards us netizens of today. A central idea can be sensitivity, as this piece shows how even at this young age, we find ways on how we can detach ourselves from the feelings of others. The line "Adaline’s phone was filled with negativity. She complained about other students constantly and avoided kindness at all costs." can be applied to real life because many people now are cyber-bullied without their awareness. A very interesting way of portraying a message that is both relevant and important to the world we are living in today.
ReplyDeleteNellie this is really good. The central idea could be bullying. The message that I got from it is that people shouldn't go behind other people's backs and be mean."The people would respond to the photos of them they didn’t know existed." This can apply to real life because lots of people are mean to each other, and they shouldn't be.
ReplyDeleteNellie, I really like how you had robots as your main characters. That was a great idea. I also like how you incorporated social media we use today like snapchat, twitter, and instagram. It was a great idea for kids to relate to. The central idea is treat others how you want to be treated. A line that supports this is “I didn’t know people were so mean." The robots didn't like how negative the kids were to each other. When the robots were looking at the messages about photos being posted of people without their permission, the victim was hurt. They wouldn't want that to happen to them, so they shouldn't do it to other people.
ReplyDeleteNellie, Outstanding job on your fiction! I really enjoyed your figurative and descriptive vocabulary! For example, "Finally, the screen lit up, and the robots clicked eagerly away at their control boards, anxiously awaiting the knowledge this box supposedly held." I think the central ideas is hate. This is teaching me that what you post today is on the internet forever and could be extracted/observed in the future. In this line it shows it, "They were all of a girl who seemed caught off guard, but not in a candid way- they were awkward and somehow wrong. She didn’t know anyone took these photos, the robot remarked." It is like when someone you just meet looks you up and sees your public comments and they may think badly of you/judge you or the other way around. Again, great job!
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ReplyDeleteGreat work! The central idea I got was anti-social. This is supported by the fact that you write, "'This is why the world is in the state it is today. The cruelty has existed forever.'" From this, I got the message that social media and other networks are degrading to the humanity of people and that social media usage should be either delayed or avoided. You demonstrate this in, "The phones were over, and the media was finally dead." This message can be applied by being more wary about using online social networks and possibly limiting phone use. Although this may be difficult for some, it may be a necessary step to take in dealing with phone addiction. Overall, amazing job!
ReplyDeleteNellie, I love the perspective of this piece and the way that you showed that our digital footprint has the potential to be very permanent. I loved your use of descriptive language, especially the beginning, "A thin metal rectangle sat on the white table in the bright room, its silver casing reflecting light onto the ceiling, still glistening thanks to being perfectly preserved." This really engaged me into the piece because it made me more curious and interested. Amazing job!!!
ReplyDeleteNellie, this fiction piece was excellent! I love how it took place in the future. I love the irony in your writing. For example, in your writing you wrote, "This is why the world is in the state it is today. The cruelty has existed forever." This is ironic because the cruelty in technology continues today, and will most likely continue throughout the future.
ReplyDeleteNellie great job! I absolutely love your depiction of the 21st century, from the futures point of view. The point of view and time, really helped show the message of how unnecessarily mean, humans can be to each other online. Some lines you had to support this were, “Adaline’s phone was filled with negativity. She complained about other students constantly and avoided kindness at all costs.” and, “The robots had never imagined something as innocent as a little box of wires could cause so much harm” I can apply this to my own life, even if I don't have any social media. If I was looking back on my life many years in the future, I would want my actions, and words, to have a good meaning and purpose, that someone else could learn from. I love the thought behind this piece, nice job!
ReplyDeleteI loved the cynical tone! I thought the central idea of this piece was harassment. A line to support this is, "The chains of hate never seemed to end. Instagram, Facebook, Twitter, Snapchat, Tumblr...it continued on. Every app offered a new way to talk behind someone’s back." I think the lesson you were trying to offer was not to harass other people. This can be applied to my life as well. Whenever I think of saying something hurtful in person, or online, I can think of this message and restrain myself.
ReplyDeleteNellie, amazing work! I liked the figurative language you used, such as "The Chains of hate never seemed to end." I think that's a really powerful line. Some descriptive language you used was "A thin metal rectangle sat on the white table in the bright room, its silver casing reflecting light onto the ceiling, still glistening thanks to being perfectly preserved."
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ReplyDeletethis is especially true for us humans. i like how you told us how we should stop the cyberbullying in social media. Nice story, Nellie!
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