Sunday, April 29, 2018


Vengeance

Chapter 1: Fired

I found myself in the throne room because I had heeded the kings call to me just to find out the worst news imaginable….“You're fired,” said the king.
“WHAT DO YOU MEAN I’M FIRED?!” I hollered at him back.
“You’re fired, plain and simple.You haven’t been taking your responsibilities as a soldier seriously, so we have to release you.”  Which were some of the last words I would ever hear from the king.
I stormed out of the castle like a man that just got fired from his job, and that is exactly what happened. How could they do this to me? I thought to myself, this is an injustice to ALL castle soldiers!
I should probably introduce myself. I am Carlos Vezzo, one of the many the Limponian soldiers, and I was the most handsome one. I was so mad at the fact that I got fired, that I pushed  over a  flimsy crate of produce like a bringand shoving his victim. I loved the way that all the produce got crushed on the ground in a colorful way.  And even though the man complained, I refused to apologize; that man wasn't meant for Limponia.
The kingdom of Limponia was a beautiful but small kingdom with rich and glorious mountains and the smell of oak giving off a calming autumn feel to the atmosphere; truly glorious, the best of the five kingdoms of Wellnion.The perfect place for someone like me, but despite that I was still fired and those woods were taunting me with their beauty,their elegance, I would burn down those forests if I could!
As you can tell I was let go for “Not being good at my job.” Belch. I abhor those words, I AM OUTRIGHT SICKENED WITH THOSE WORDS!...But sadly my glorious self would never see the inside of that castle again. With my magnificent uniform gone, I felt as if I was stripped of my glory.
I reclassly approached my house in a brash a manner.  I hated my house; it was a disgusting tenement that they only sell to the poor.  It’s a disgrace that they would even consider giving me that horrid house, it’s a disgrace! I vigorously threw my sword down on the front porch.  They let me keep my sword mainly because I decorated it, and they didn't want other soldiers to use a sword with jewels and ribbon. After I entered my house, I started a bit of a tantrum. “THIS IS UNBELIEVABLE!” I shouted abruptly, “THIS SORT OF INJUSTICE DESERVES A RIOT, OUTRAGE, VENGEANCE”!.....And that’s when it came to me, vengeance.
I could start the riot; I could start the outrage; I could take revenge on Limponia. It would all be me. But I soon realized a problem in my genius plan. How would I do it? It’s not like I could just go inside the Royal castle and say, “Hey, I want vengeance, so I’m going to kill you; bye!”  Think, think Carlos, think…..I had no idea. “Will my brilliant idea be ruined by ineptitude?!” I shouted   “There has to be a way, there has to be!” ….but then I realized all of my problems would be fixed by the one thing I left on my front porch.
I snached my sword from my front porch, realizing the one thing that I needed for this plan, my sword, was in my hand! I was glad when they let me keep my sword; it was such an astonishing sight.
Glimmering jewels, boldly colored ribbons, and a glossy golden hilt; it was amazing. I would love my sword until I perished.  Beautiful swords aside, this weapon was all I needed. I could enter the kingdom, sneak into the castle, and assassinate the king in one foul blow.  And it's not like it would be hard. I’m such a magnificent fighter that taking on the king’s guards would be a snap.This is perfect! With this I will have my revenge! I thought to myself, so no one would hear my plan. I soon went to sleep, dreaming about how successful this plan would be in the long run.
            To bad that dream was a lie.




-Robert Cusato

5 comments:

  1. Robert,
    Your story was great! There were a few spots that I found funny like: "I stormed out of the castle like a man that just got fired from his job, and that's exactly what happened." and "Hey, I want vengeance, so I'm going to kill you; bye!" I think the central idea is selfishness because of lines like: " I'm such a magnificent fighter that taking on the king's guards would be a snap." and " My glorious self would never see the inside of that castle again." I think the lesson is that the way you do things is your choice, but keep in mind that things have consequences and some things depend on your actions.

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  2. I really liked how you used a bigger font to emphasize the yelling. I think you used a lot of descriptive language like when you said " the smell of oak giving off a calm atum feel."

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  3. This is a great story. I love the descriptive language you used when talking about your sword, "Glimmering jewels, boldly colored ribbons, and a glossy golden hilt; it was amazing." A message that I inferred from this is that even if someone does not realize how great you can actually be they will once you do something extraordinary with your own power you and others will see what is really inside of you, and if you will have success in your plans or not. A line from the story that helped me infer this is " I soon went to sleep, dreaming about how successful this plan would be in the long run.
    To bad that dream was a lie." I can apply this to my own life because I should be able to try to succeed even if I fail.

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  4. Robert, this was great. I particularly enjoyed the main character, Carlos Vezzo and his almost overpowering narcissism. The line, "The kingdom of Limponia was a beautiful but small kingdom with rich and glorious mountains and the smell of oak giving off a calming autumn feel to the atmosphere" really brings the setting to life. It helps me understand that the kingdom of Limponia is beautiful.

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  5. I liked this first chapter of the story, and would read the rest of the book if it were published! I really liked the end of the chapter: "Too bad that dream was a lie."
    I also liked your use of the word abhor: "Belch. I abhor those words."

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