Santa Losing Weight
Can Santa be skinny but still jolly ?
“Hey Honey, can you
grab my Suit?” Santa added. “I want to make sure that it still fits.”
“Yes, I’m coming,” said
Mrs.Claus, “but are you sure you can fit in it?
You’ve gained a lot of pounds last year when the kids left too many
cookies.” Mrs.Claus walked in the room and handed the bright red suit like a
fresh new apple to Santa. Santa took the suit and gave it a hard long look at
it.
“Are you sure this is
mine?” asked Santa.
“You’re the only one
who wears a big red suit,” replied Mrs.Claus.
“Ok, ok, can you go get
Rudolph? Maybe he can help me,” asked Santa.
“Yes I will; he would
help you lose the weight in no time,” replied Mrs.Claus. “You will be fitting
in that suit in no time.”
Mrs.Claus left the room
while Santa sat in his chair thinking if Rudolph could really help him lose the
weight. Just then Rudolph came in with his red nose glitter on and off.
“You called me, Boss,” Rudolph announced.
“Ohh yes, can you help
me?” continued Santa. “My suit will not
fit me. I can’t be going down chimneys in
pajamas.”
Rudolph went over to
the humongous suit and gazed at it.
“I can help you lose
the weight,” replied Rudolph. “But we need to start now, so hurry.”
“I will meet you in the
gym,” said Rudolph.
“When did we get a gym?”
asked Santa.
“We always had a gym,”
replied Rudolph, “it’s just you never used it.”
Santa ran into his bedroom to go change in his workout
clothes, then ran to the gym where Rudolph was waiting.
“I’m here,” Santa said.
“Good,” Rudolph continued, “Are you sure you are
ready?”
“Ready as ever,” said
Santa.
Right next to Rudolph
was a treadmill. As Rudolph started talking Santa started to fall asleep. So as
any reindeer with a glowing nose would do, Rudolph yelled, “Wake up, I don’t
have all day here.” That’s when Santa quickly jumped on the treadmill and began
to run.
“How long do I have to
do this for?” reported Santa.
“We are just getting
started,” announced Rudolph.
Everyday Santa and
Rudolph were going at it with the treadmill and lifting weights. Until one day Santa gave up.
“I can’t do this
anymore,” said Santa. “I need cookies and milk.”
“No you don’t,” replied
Rudolph, “you are doing so well, only a couple more pounds.”
“No I can’t,” said
Santa.
Rudolph and Santa went
back and forth until Rudolph went and grabbed an old photo of how Santa use to
look.
“Do you want to be this
person again? The one who always ate 400 cookies on Christmas Eve?”
declared Rudolph, “or the one who we had
to a call the fire department on because you got stuck in the middle of the
chimney going down and coming back up?”
“No,” replied Santa.
“Well than get back on
that treadmill,” said Rudolph.
“Ok,”
replied Santa.
It was Christmas Eve,
and Santa was finally ready to try on his suit. Santa looked in the mirror,
hoping that he had changed. This was his first time looking in a mirror since
he lost his weight, and finally it was time. Santa grabbed his bittersweet suit
and threw it on. It was a great fit. Santa never knew he could do it. Santa was
so happy he ran to tell the others.
“Look guys,” announced
Santa, “it fits!”
“Great job, Boss,”
replied Rudolph.
“Thank you,” said
Santa.
“Hey, if you can dream
it you can do it,” said Rudolph.
Then Santa said goodbye
to the others, and off he went delivering gifts all around the world in his red
jolly suit. All around the world.
-Tresha Behari
I liked how you started your fiction very strong with the line, "'Hey Honey, can you grab my Suit?' Santa added. 'I want to make sure that it still fits.'" I love most how you made this about Santa losing weight, it just grabs my attention and makes me wonder: What gonna happen now that Santa is back and delivering presents.
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ReplyDeleteYour story was very interesting. I liked how you used other things like, "announced" and "replied" instead of, "he said" or "Said Santa." You had a strong lesson, and I could clearly infer it towards the end of your story. I think your central idea was diligence because of the line, "Everyday Santa and Rudolph were going at it with the treadmill and lifting weights." I think the lesson based on the central idea was keep trying even when things get hard because of the lines, "If you can dream it you can do it." and, "Santa never knew he could do it." I can apply this to my own life because sometimes things do get hard and I just have to keep telling myself I can get through it and I just have to keep trying. Your story was great!!
I love how you started your story off with dialogue to get me right into the scene of things. I think your central idea could be determination because Santa was determined to lose that weight to be able to fit back into his suit. A line from your story that supports my central idea is "Ready as ever" this was when Rudolph asked Santa if he was sure he's ready to get started exercising and getting hard work done. I can apply this to my own life because I have to be ready and make sure I am ready to begin and finish hard work.
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ReplyDeleteI love the way your story has a lot of dialogue in it. Your use of figurative language helps the scene fall into place. "Mrs.Claus walked in the room and handed the bright red suit like a fresh new apple to Santa." This quote really helps me picture Santa and his red suit he wears. I believe that the central idea of your story is when you set your mind to something you can always achieve it. The line from your story that helps me support the central idea is "Hey, if you can dream it you can do it," I can apply your story to my own life because sometimes I feel like giving up something but then I imagine myself getting through it and seeing the happy outcome of things. Over all awesome story!
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ReplyDeleteTresha, Interesting story!
DeleteI thought the main idea was goals. Santa wanted that suit to fit, and without his goal he couldn’t have made this possible an example is, “you are doing so well, only a couple more pounds.” Which shows his goal is to lose weight. The lesson that I inferred was when you want something, you have to go for it. It is now or never, which can be a hard choice to make make in life; the piece shows the readers to take chances.
Cool story Tresha! I loved your point of view and how you explained the message of being able to do anything that you want. I love when Rudolph said "Hey, if you can dream it you can do it,” because this represented santa's strength throughout the process of losing weight. Great job again.
ReplyDeleteYou started your story off very strong, explaining the problem right away. Especially when Mrs. claus said “but are you sure you can fit in it? You’ve gained a lot of pounds last year when the kids left too many cookies." That definitely pulled me in to the story. You also used some figurative language, such as ” Mrs.Claus walked in the room and handed the bright red suit like a fresh new apple to Santa."I see a central idea of "Motivation." Rudolph was motivating santa to lose the weight. I also thought the message was. "Dont give up on yourself, even if it takes more work than you are used to doing."
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